She thought it best to write a note

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Open Poetry #32

She thought it best to write a note

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2004-06-25 06:53 AM

She thought it best to write a note
in simple terms and clear
in case he couldn’t hear
through the barriers
between that realm and here.

“I have roses in my garden,
this winter they are pink,
and in the middle part
(do roses have a heart?)
there lies a sense of certainty
that summer’s artful heat
won’t bend them to the ground.

Planted deep outside my door
in endless sands of time
entwined with soul they grow
and forge a path to home
through seasonal pitfalls
and abandonment.

I know of many roses,
wild, sweet, tender, young,
and some so perfect, plastic,
but my roses are unique,
they never lose the need
to hold again the hand
of a perfect soul.”

She thought it best to write a note
but maybe he can’t read
and I told her then to tear it up,
to be the same as me,
and wait for the truth
to finally unfold.

She tore it up I’m told,
of the roses I don’t know;
I think perhaps they’re growing old
In the winter cold!

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

1 posted 2004-06-25 10:13 PM

Planted deep outside my door
in endless sands of time
entwined with soul they grow
and forge a path to home
through seasonal pitfalls
and abandonment.

I really liked this part in particular. Enjoyed the entire write.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2004-06-26 04:28 AM

wonderfully done *sigh*

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

3 posted 2004-06-26 04:39 AM

Thanks Susan and passing shadows for the read. I think there are many sighs in the atmosphere and I wonder what happens to them.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2004-06-29 09:51 AM

There are several lines
I would have captured
to place here, in awe...

but they seemed to dissolve
before my eyes,
and were lost in the copy
and paste of surprise.

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

5 posted 2004-06-29 11:05 AM

Thank you so much for the read, Sunshine. I guess it's like trying to duplicate the past - it too dissolves.

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