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Crossing of the Threads
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Crossing of the threads In and out the needle prick swings like rope on wooden stick listen I can hear through time not rhyme that we touch yes fine a weave like embryo of flower’s sleeve too close yet feel the air of loss just one small thread forgotten cross wing a flutter pull with me swift the flight of harmony and yet down down the flow and tide back forward moon the draw abide there is small comfort in the sand each piece of life is like my hand to separate or be remote in accuracy I am too close So breathe the air I leave in wake no need to sigh I am your mate then whip the thread one through the other see the woman who is also brother |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
"So breathe the air I leave in wake no need to sigh I am your mate" I hate it when you write with this deep a feeling, for it truly does make one ache. You do take the thread and leave no cross undone, that is a given. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"listen I can hear through time" ~ This line, especially, spoke to me!  EA |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
as usual, you've left me in awe |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
*smile* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, Always a delight to read. An excellent weave. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Martie, this is ever so a curious piece. Different for you! loved there is small comfort in the sand each piece of life is like my hand the last lines have me thinking of reincarnation. Corinne |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
In and out the needle prick swings like rope on wooden stick listen I can hear through time not rhyme Hiya Martie, boy what a read! This part especially reminded me of the old needle and thread waving back and forth over the stomach of a lady with child, and it's supposed to tell if it's a boy or a girl... hearting time? Your incredible writing is almost like a metaphysical meditation...listening to God's voice |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"So breathe the air I leave in wake no need to sigh I am your mate" Once again..you leave me in awe...speechless. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - your poetic brilliance weaves the reality of your life challenges into poems that touch us so deeply - Paul |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Martie, you're an incredible writer, you leave me speechless and you leave me feeling each line. Just amazing you are. Maree. it's a keeper The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Martie -- what a deep poem this is. It has a sense of timelessness about it, but feels sad, too. ..jo |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Beautifully written piece of work. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
beautiful words Martie |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
fascinating write... regards sudhir |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
wing a flutter pull with me swift the flight of harmony and yet down down the flow and tide back forward moon the draw abide ~*~ I have a flutter for you...  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
"just one small thread forgotten cross wing a flutter pull with me swift the flight of harmony" Alas that this is true....something we think is small can start a misweave that ruins all for us.... ....unless the mating is a true match, and the runners can weather a re-start. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
"listen I can hear through time not rhyme" Such an insightful line! Beautifully crafted...and felt. KJ Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Very nice Martie...a lovely read, this |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
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