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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2004-06-23 03:54 AM

There
where
you were
I swept
bristles bending from the strain
of the memories in press
as I stood there adding stone
to the planked reality
crushing lung capacity
tender bone adversity
confess
the truth shall set ye free!
as another rock is placed
(how heavy is the weight of guilt)

Say it's just another test.
Tell me this is mockery.
This
this is
the true story
of why witches ride the broom...
Tidying the past in sweep
chards of charlatans in bone
wheezing whispers
worship me
acknowledging the weight
atone

I'd trade knowledge for a guess
if it meant I weren't alone.

yeah.

I sweep another speck.

Give me ignorance.

(Yer blessed.)

There
where
you were
I wept

polishing the stone...

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

1 posted 2004-06-23 03:59 AM

OMG!!!! Karen, you just blew me away with this one!

......jo

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

2 posted 2004-06-23 04:12 AM

Ignorance can be blissful. The yoke of guilt can choke! Ride that broom high and fast and let the wind and the rain erase the last trace of such oppressive thoughts!

A terrific write!!!

I see that you are burning the midnight oil as well! We really should be in bed! Now, now, that was not an invitation! lol

EA

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

3 posted 2004-06-23 04:38 AM

WOW! Not only did you blow iliana away, you blew me away too m'lady

yer so passionate.

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2004-06-23 05:03 AM

awesome

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

5 posted 2004-06-23 07:27 AM

Karen I always say I want to write just like you but when it's all said and done NO ONE can write like you.

This is another stellar write gal. I don't think I shall ever be tired of reading you.
Well done!

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

6 posted 2004-06-23 08:15 AM

"I'd trade knowledge for a guess
if it meant I weren't alone.

yeah.

I sweep another speck.

Give me ignorance.

(Yer blessed.)

There
where
you were
I wept

polishing the stone..."

Some of those stones just need tossed or at least put in the bag of the person they really belong to...

Love you lady.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

7 posted 2004-06-23 08:22 AM

Karen, this was soooo bittersweet and yet written from a heart of gold.

God bless you both.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

8 posted 2004-06-23 01:04 PM

Gawd Karen I wish I could write like you!!
Awesome write...just awesome..I am speechless.
Love ya lady~

Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that.
Something from the sea, whichever one I'm near.
When I stray too far from beachland, it calls me back

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

9 posted 2004-06-23 01:31 PM

Yanno with all those muscles you have acquired through heavy labour I would say, just pick up one of those stones and huck it right between the eyes of the source, and I swear to you that you will grin. Turn away and whistle after - like you didn't do it should help too. Oh, my! Such a sad sweep from a sweet heart.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

10 posted 2004-06-23 09:09 PM

Tidying the past in sweep
chards of charlatans in bone
wheezing whispers
worship me
acknowledging the weight
atone
===================================

you do know how brilliant that verse is dont you?

If not...just ask me..I'll tell ya.

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

11 posted 2004-06-24 08:46 AM

lyric planking

self witch-pressing?
hmmmmmm

hugging you

gemjop
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

12 posted 2004-06-24 09:45 AM

This
this is
the true story
of why witches ride the broom...
Tidying the past in sweep
chards of charlatans in bone
wheezing whispers
worship me
acknowledging the weight
atone

wow, wow, wow. I don't know what to say, you get me like that a lot. In fact, sometimes it causes me to say nothing. I'm reading, ok? just so you know.

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

13 posted 2004-06-24 10:20 AM

enjoyed

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

14 posted 2004-06-25 01:48 AM

"self-witch pressing"

grin

you know me well.

As always I'm touched by the generosity of the replies and the genuine caring that shines on through this screen.

Thank you my friends.

and loving whispers to vilya......

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

15 posted 2004-06-25 01:27 PM

And if you don't believe JM, I'll be there singing the same song, second verse. *G*

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

16 posted 2004-06-26 08:58 AM

There
where
you were
I wept

polishing the stone...

~*~

C'mere, you...

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

17 posted 2004-06-26 09:59 AM

I enjoyed the flow and feel of this. I found the broom riding witch explaination quite an intriguing thought. I love it when I am taken out of my ordinary state of mind and given a glimpse of another path of thought. Thanks.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

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