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New Years dance
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New Years dance |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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There you are, one New Years’ Eve slow dancing with a girl named Heidi Heidi, tall and solid blond and pigtailed the very picture of Heidiness You can smell the Alps and its untrodden snow in the hollow of her throat And feel the joining of her thighs pressing warmly into your leg your hands, resting on the flair of her hips As you dance through the decay of days she runs a hand over your years wondering what might lie beneath the dust And is intrigued by the prospects But you see in the crisp blue of her eyes an Alpine sky, newly minted and a clock approaching midnight A reminder of your date with Bridget also blond, also young just not as “new” but, used to your ways So, you leave Heidi standing in the confetti of possibility that another man another time, will have to age her And you go to the bar down the street where Bridget will soon announce “Last Call” and take you home Where she will polish your patina not exactly erasing your years but rather, making them shine |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
absolutely gorgeous with appreciation |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
May you "shine" forevermore...   Linda |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Is it the "low carb thang" that makes your brain so sharp or what Yeti? This line I absolutely loved, by the way, just not as “new” but, used to your ways This is the story of my life actually  Great Ed, and Happy Father's Day to you too. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
some fantastic lines in this and mysteria picked one of them. gorgeous write i feel some sentiment peeking through this..not as strong as some things youve written , but still...I really like this  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sensual writing here! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
You can smell the Alps and its untrodden snow in the hollow of her throat thats my Bro! bloody fantastic. Maree  The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
Great poem. Loved it. Had me from word one. Reading it like I couldn't wait to "see" the ending. It was a cool, cool piece of work. Kevin |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed Wonderful choice making poem....with a smile at smart! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
You are a funny guy, aren't you wranx....that last line....hehehe -- The poem was great. You are a wonder! .....jo |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
lucky lucky lucky and a hell of a good poem I like this 'un |
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