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Open Poetry #32

Scared and Stiff

Paper Tiger
Member

since 2003-09-28

Posts 77

0 posted 2004-06-20 08:50 PM

Your curious hand
touches mine
as we dig through the sand,
and you,
without thought,
move your hand away.
You look over at me
with deep, glinting eyes
waiting for me
to meet them.
I stare back at you,
and you look away
and stroke your hair
and smile.
Love is and will be waiting
for us to discover it.

We see much, observe little, and perceive less.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2004-06-20 09:24 PM

Stirring thoughts
TD

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2004-06-21 03:50 AM

Paper Tiger
Member

since 2003-09-28

Posts 77

3 posted 2004-06-21 04:28 AM

Thanks for replying, I really do appreciate it! But perhaps you could say more than two words or just posting smiley faces.

We see much, observe little, and perceive less.

wayoutwalt
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

4 posted 2004-06-21 04:48 AM

i like your comment...

the poem works well with its short jagged lines. that's the best i can do.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

5 posted 2004-06-21 04:45 PM

Sometimes less is more...the beauty of this write leaves one speechless.
TD

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

6 posted 2004-06-21 05:51 PM

Anticipation of what could possibly be is half the fun! You captured these feelings in this vivid vignette.

~ May your hands meet in the sands of love!

Love & Light,
EA

Bonnie j
Senior Member

since 2003-06-27

Posts 1588
Ohio

7 posted 2004-06-21 09:22 PM

The feeling of new love that is about to bloom is beautiful.The shyness, the feeling of being unsure is captured within this write.
Thank you for sharing your words of poetry with us. Hope to be seeing more.
BonBon

Paper Tiger
Member

since 2003-09-28

Posts 77

8 posted 2004-06-21 10:47 PM

I would like to thank all of you who replied - it really does mean a lot to me. Your words have filled my heart with joy.

We see much, observe little, and perceive less.

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