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Toying with perception.......
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Toying with perception....... |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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"Am I too late?" He could never have been on time it didn't exist for us anymore. Did it ever? We were so out of joint, premature even within our delay. We seem to collide over the years as if to see if we're ready this time I laugh aloud at perfect timing shrill letting my weakness show. I cannot help toying with time wondering when my words will reach his ears and how he will hear my answer "No..and yes." |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Well done. Sometimes it's like that, yes?  SusanThe whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
Really, a thought-provoking poem. My favorite kind. This one moves really well and I find nothing but talent oozing from the text. Your poem was a fine find for me. Thanks for allowing me to read it. Kevin |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hey, Gemma-girl.  This is a way cool poem. I love this part... We were so out of joint, premature even within our delay. Makes the reader think. Hugs, Ethel Mae  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Toying with time....I like that a lot! Good write, gemma girl. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
neat write...and yes, very thought-provoking...toying the perception of time...a very heady subject indeed...it was a pleasure to read... |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
your title grabbed my attention right off! Great creative thinking and writing! Sadelite |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great writing |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Love this write Gemma... the toying with time theme is a wonderful idea. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
loved how this flowed and the words behind it all as always |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
gem, this was beautiful, perky and confident |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sitting here and smiling at you and at just how beautifully you write pretty laydee  Maree. The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
this clawed at me, hugs |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
I liked this in a strange unexplained way. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"We were so out of joint, premature even within our delay. We seem to collide over the years as if to see if we're ready this time" Had to chuckle to myself when reading this Gem 'cause it described so well one of my favorite ex-obsessions... Every couple of years she and I would run into each other and before long we'd get to thinking (usually due to our alcohol altered perception...lol) that we were somehow better equipped to make a success of things this time around. Took us a few years, but we finally figured out that some matches just aren't meant to stay lit...  |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
*sighs... |
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