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Brew of a River Basin
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Brew of a River Basin |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Cream and coffee brew, Abundant, earths torrential wake; Foam, sprinkles, stir-stick twigs give rush to season due. Rapid toothpick tree with arms stretched like rake, Dash upon the flood melt bank Etch its soil free. Whirl it, shake it, add to mix Shore cappuccino to land enrich. Oh River,fertilize my mind with your silt Wake me with your sands of time. [This message has been edited by Sadelite (06-06-2004 09:14 PM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Is this about the Dayton flood or the current conditions where you live? Interesting analogies -- the river must look like how I like my coffee.  |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Not about anything really; just remembering the richness of the land by the river... The river was high last week, leaving this image. (Yes, it does look exactly like your coffee! Do you still want to drink it?) remembering how the river has been dammed north of here and wondering about the trade-off; it has been nice not to have had a flood for umteen years, but waters carry with them a wealth also... Just wondering; thinking about rich land by the Nile; thinking about how kindred spirits combine and their blessings; Gee, I guess this was about something afterall... Hm. I guess I've been in orbit tooooo long! Sadelite [This message has been edited by Sadelite (06-05-2004 12:20 AM).] |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
I really enjoyed the imagery of your poem. You are a talented poet. It was quite fun to read. I felt as if I was standing on the bank. Thank you for sharing it. Your poetic friend, Kevin |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Kevo, It is I who should thank you for reading it! Ditto. I think you're quite talented! I'm glad you felt like you are standing on the bank. Sadie |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
good write |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Passing Shadows, Glad to see you. Thanks for your comment. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Cathy, I love how a weird mix of views and emotions can bring out such amazing poetry! The comparisons and images in this are awesome  Ah well, the whole thing is awesome! Great job! Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Alyssa, I needed that... and appreciate all the wonderful comments. The more I read this one, the more I like it. It's me all over (except I don't drink coffee!) I hope others enjoy it as you have, but I sometimes layer too much, making it trying to understand. Thanks, Sweet One. I'm glad you liked it. Cathy |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Oh River,fertilize my mind with your silt Wake me with your sands of time. So happy that I peeked in and found your River poem, dear Sadie. This is one of my favorites of yours, quite definitely. hmmmm .... the cappuccino from now on will always bring a thought of love from Sadie ... Love you, God bless you. I'll be back in July and as ..... a grandmother! Busy busy getting ready! Margherita  |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Love it Sadie. I'll drink a cup of coffee to this poem. :-) |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Margherita, I'm so happy for you, Grandma! I've really missed your writing-I don't know if it's just because I haven't been online as much or if you just haven't been posting as much. Wondered how you were... You're so sweet! I appreciate your kind words. I hope I have given the cappuccino a flavor of love and not muddy water! That would be awful! Take care. I want to hear some Grandma poetry when upon your return! love, Sadie froggy, Would you like some cream and sugar? Glad you enjoyed! Have a good weekend. I'll catch you later...I look forward to catching up on your poetry. Sadie |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Great write! Eric |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Any catfish in that brew?  Excellent job, m'friend. Never, ever settle on your last poem...use every new one as a springboard to the next...just like this! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Eric, thank you! Those words mean a lot! Sadie Sunshine, Perhaps one or two. ( By the way, what happens to fish when a river does flood? Do the fish get an extra surge of oxygen? Just wondered that...do you know? or are athey harmed?) Take care, Sunshine. Enjoyed your comments. Sadie |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
You lie in the depths watchng breeze ripples dapple the water's skin. Even as you show them so clear, so clear, in the shimmering of your words I begin to see what you see, those dark shapes that swim between..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Ratleader, Well observed, my friend. The cappuccino is awakening. Thanks, Sadelite |
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