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A No Win Situation
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A No Win Situation |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Where are the warm pools of red That quick witted words lanced free, What slashes on bared skin shed Since you’ve raped dignity, There are things I could have said A mild defense left to me, But would defense have mattered When you carefully battered Me to nothing but silence, Wordless I stand here hopeless, You offer no penitence, You giving no forgiveness, You wish that I was cold dead Or my parents never bred You have warped reality Leaving nothing but silence. I bled tears Gloom Although in first person, this is not about me, but some Man On the Street being verbally abused by a woman. He might have deserved it, but not on the street. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this made me very sad. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
very true... certainly not on the street... A fine capture and an excellent write of how it affects... Regards Sudhir |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
and you left me in silence. enjoyed the flow, powerful. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
No one deserves verbal abuse - on the street, or in private. But you painted the scene so very well. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Keen observation and penned well, Gloom.  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
harsh words...sometimes said without thinking of the consequences |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
This ached; (but of course, gloom tells it as it is...excellent write to evoke emotions. You are a master at this. |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
Love brings out the best in people not the worst. I really enjoyed your poem. Thanks for sharing it. Kevin |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Ah...those are the kind of people to just walk away from because they never get it. Walk away and be a better person for having done so. Karma baby, karma. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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