Open Poetry #32 |
Just Say [Waka] |
choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Just say "they're dewdrops" [This message has been edited by choshi (06-05-2004 10:21 AM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
choshi -- oh, this one, so very lovely, yet so sad....... .....jo |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
choshi There is much feeling in these few words of beauty. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Beautiful write! *S* I'm glad I found this one! *S* |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful...yet with such sad longing. Well done. Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
heart touching, good one |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I love and admire the way you do these |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
though those dreams are shattered they still reflect sky and within it the sun but now in thousands of views rather than bound to one... |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
A bow to the master on this one....you say so much in this little space! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Just say "they're dewdrops" glistening on the spring grass as the sunrises- you fade into long shadows of so many broken dreams." It is so sad, but perfectly expressed. Truly inspiring me to respond in some form or other. I'm just the ladybug under grass bent roof, I can't see shadows fading But fathom heat from rolling drop. Sadie |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Melancholic yes, but very powerful and beautiful in the vision it produces. Love, Margherita |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
I'm just the ladybug under grass bent roof, I can't see shadows fading But fathom heat from rolling drop. Sadie Lovely perspective Sadie. Thank you ~P |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
though those dreams are shattered they still reflect sky and within it the sun but now in thousands of views rather than bound to one... Very powerful and hopeful Dawn. Thank you.
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
what poignant and haunting imagery. i'm glad i found this... how do i write a Waka, may i ask? |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Thank you Kaile....~P |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Thank you James, I am glad that you enjoyed...~P |
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