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exhale
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since 2003-06-13
Posts 646
Alberta,Canada

0 posted 2004-06-02 08:14 PM



you arent like all the rest
you never have been
but that's alright with me

they don't see everything you are
i love you for you
i love that fact that you talk about sunsets
and romantic comedies
every word you've ever written down on paper
screams amazing
why can't you see what i see?

a poet in his own writes
you've paved the way for my heart to follow you
and it will
with it's guards down
you might hurt me,
but i'd give up my heart for you
i'd give up myself for you
because your worth it
every little peice of you,
is worth it.


thank god for internet cafes!

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1 posted 2004-06-03 12:58 PM


How did this poem ever go fifty slots down without a response!?! I like your wordplay especially in this, and the way you approach your subject at a tangent....

and this

every word you've ever written down on paper
screams amazing
why can't you see what i see?

Takes me to a place I've been with several people, including three in this group....so much talent but they don't see it in themselves. Should I name them? No, one's gone, one has a new name, and the third posts very rarely, though he tells me he reads fairly often without talking much....if they see this they'll know who they are....won't you, RSK!....

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passing shadows
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2 posted 2004-06-03 02:15 AM


I know how you feel...I remember
suthern
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3 posted 2004-06-04 10:25 AM


every word you've ever written down on paper
screams amazing
why can't you see what i see?
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you've paved the way for my heart to follow you
and it will
with it's guards down
you might hurt me,
but i'd give up my heart for you
i'd give up myself for you
because your worth it

This says as much about the writer as it does the recipient... and I'd say both are pretty amazing. *S*

I like it very much... yes! *S*

JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
4 posted 2004-06-04 10:35 AM


Beautiful emotion in this wonderful poem!
Very enjoyable read.

JL


She said: ”You look cute in the dark.”


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