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gemjop
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0 posted 2004-05-31 07:03 PM


Twisting ankles to thighs

foetal

I press fingerprints upon my own evidence;

resigned body

insignificant shell

it feels like nothing

against stone laid in symmetry

I've seen your aura

and followed the maps

the air between us is numb

when I remember the lines

and forget to read between them.

© Copyright 2004 gj - All Rights Reserved
iliana
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1 posted 2004-05-31 07:07 PM


W O W -- powerful writing.
Dark Angel
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2 posted 2004-05-31 07:10 PM


WOW Gem.

Fantastic!



Maree

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

passing shadows
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displaced
3 posted 2004-06-01 03:57 AM


always love you
inkedgoddess
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4 posted 2004-06-01 07:30 AM



the air between us is numb

when I remember the lines

and forget to read between them.


like the punch in this ending;
hey , where's the blonde? lol
this is a nice look too;

Marshalzu
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5 posted 2004-06-01 09:23 AM


This is fantastic writing that I really enjoyed reading.
muted
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6 posted 2004-06-01 02:06 PM


"I've seen your aura

and followed the maps

the air between us is numb

when I remember the lines

and forget to read between them"
````````````````````````````````
DAMN
this is good!

Aenimal
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7 posted 2004-06-01 03:10 PM


jesus gem, this one, my favourite of gem favourites

**Ah I just noticed the picture! brunettes..get me everytime

Duncan
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8 posted 2004-06-01 11:13 PM


"I press fingerprints upon my own evidence;

resigned body

insignificant shell

it feels like nothing

against stone laid in symmetry"


There are very few poets that I enjoy every time I read them.  You are one...  


Kaoru
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9 posted 2004-06-01 11:36 PM


Mingling with straight lines and obscure curves..

love love love.

Susan Caldwell
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10 posted 2004-06-04 07:44 AM


I am in complete agreement with Duncan and Meg.  

  lovie.  

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

LeeJ
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11 posted 2004-06-04 07:52 AM


good one!!!!
JL
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12 posted 2004-06-04 10:32 AM


"when I remember the lines
and forget to read between them."

That line tells it all.  Great one!

JL

She said: ”You look cute in the dark.”


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