Open Poetry #32 |
from the journal of an Insomniac gone mad |
Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
from the journal of an Insomniac gone mad book67 page8 can you hold the night_eye watcher, distracted and wrecked by the rolled about, calloused over heart do daymares count when counting wishes on candles never lit if upside and inside are colored in the plaid falling free form from your tongue, and i stand with a bucket of holes beneath all the yellow you are will you breathe into you the outside of my right_way today and see the beautiful shadow i keep locked away behind an auburn drape of security where insecure thoughts color the pencils i paint my day with and if i allowed the lines of my poems to press against your space would you run or spin with me how do i share the madness of this love when all i am and all i have are the moments when i become the lotus yet to bloom ©SDT'04 "yet each man kills the thing he loves |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
excellent write, title pulled me in |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Snow -- to date, one of the most exquisite pieces I've read! I am so impressed. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
neat write...so very well crafted...so very cleverly done...kudos |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada |
it's such an amazing feeling to read such a masterpeice. will you breathe into you the outside of my right_way today and see the beautiful shadow i keep locked away beautiful |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Very wonderfully and powerfully woven. Absolutely lovely. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
This is beyond impressive.. Pulled me in and set a mood with your words. Very, very, well done. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
very powerfully articulated, this one's a definate winner..brilliant! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
I went mad once then south eventually I ended up right back here at 5 am coooool stuff ms |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
what a one of the best I have read in a very long time! Just wonderful. I know insomnia to well.... |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
This is a great write. Enjoyed the read to the max! JL She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
your comments to this piece mean so much to me. thank you all !! snow "yet each man kills the thing he loves |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow...I might not sleep tonight |
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