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Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2004-06-02 06:45 AM

Time cannot mend
it is not thread,
and if it were
it'd be too brittle,
fraying at the ends.

  I am captured
by brilliant lights
fluttering between my fingers,
  but I could never feel them.

Matter
is dependant upon it's form,
juxtaposed with like shapes.
Words lose meaning like this,
so I refuse to write them.

I only draw
  obscure paintings,
formations of trust -
androgynous, geometric beings
that escape from me in the night.

When there is no problem
  but there is one.
Mistakes and
poor conclusions.

I decipher a fate not my own,
much like the letters
forming words
that have been spoken
many times before me.

I don't yearn for the
color,
merely
the defining moment.

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

1 posted 2004-06-02 07:19 AM

whoa! the entire poem was so significant, each line packed with meaning, but the last line packed a wallop...what an elegant and most enveloping poem. I loved this.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

2 posted 2004-06-02 08:30 AM

"I don't yearn for the
color,
merely
the defining moment."

*nodding* yep another master piece.

Yanno, for months now for some bizarre reason that I can not explain everytime I hear the song, "My Immortal" I think of you. I have no clue why...

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

3 posted 2004-06-02 05:06 PM

I decipher a fate not my own,
much like the letters
forming words
that have been spoken
many times before me.

I don't yearn for the
color,
merely
the defining moment.

Yes! absolutely wonderful.

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2004-06-02 05:07 PM

the defining moment.

~*~

Seek...and find.
This is one of them.

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

5 posted 2004-06-02 05:18 PM

you never cease to blow me away...
i did write away right? yup just checking

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

6 posted 2004-06-02 05:37 PM

Your style and imagination are totally unique -- really enjoyed this, Kaoru!

....jo

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

7 posted 2004-06-03 07:34 AM

oh the color can be so inviting tho; the lines are too harsh for me, tho i could use some definition too;
so much in here all at once , pulling me back to read over and over

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

8 posted 2004-06-03 07:44 AM

"I only draw
obscure paintings,
formations of trust -
androgynous, geometric beings
that escape from me in the night."

~ Yes, and you write of "defining moments" in a most unique and special way. You have the gift of poetry, Dear Kaoru!

EA

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

9 posted 2004-06-03 12:52 PM

Wonderful, wonderful poem...and poet.

Eric

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

10 posted 2004-06-03 03:13 PM

I've read this many times now, and I never know quite what to say, and every time, a different part of it stands out to me.

emotional brilliance.

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