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Old gods and windowboxes |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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Where did all of the old gods go when they were no longer wanted, after the temples they had been evicted from have tumbled and crumbled? Do you think they quietly accepted their pensions and checked themselves into a retirement home to spend eternity reliving tales of the good old days over endless games of Pinochle? Or could they be pursuing their occupations, still in some diminished capacity? Ceres, now as thin as a wheat straw tending her small window garden on the fire escape of her rented room And the sweating old man leaning on his shovel while a cement liner is lowered into his days’ labor Could this be Pluto, just keeping his hand in? What of Bacchus? Is he now living in a rough camp under some overpass with other cast outs? Men, who in another time, would have been celebrants Or Venus, does she yet accept offerings and sacrifices? Bruises on her thighs just visible below her too tight skirt and a weary lostness, visible in the harsh light of neon |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
You always leave me in awe...Beautiful Sh'ma Yisrael Adonai Elohaynu Adonai Echad. Ani Adonai Elohaychem, asher hotzaytiy etchem mayeretz Mitzrayim,li-h'yot lahem laylohim. Ani Adonai Elohaychem. *wink* Shalom |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Good question -- good verse! |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
you know, they throw some "kickbutt" BBQ's once a month...All that sacrificial goat to get through LOL  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Hmmmm...can't be jealous, I guess -- I've wanted to write a poem like this but you DID, and better than I would have! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Ani Adonai Elohaychem, asher hotzaytiy etchem mayeretz Mitzrayim, li-h'yot lahem laylohim. Ani Adonai Elohaychem. I am the Lord, your God, who lead you from the land of Egypt to be a god to you. I am the Lord, your God. (Just to help translate a previous quote. Ed, I lived in Israel for a year, and know a bit of Hebrew. But you can translate this online these days without knowing any Hebrew) as always, your poetry makes me ponder  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what a thinker! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ceres, now as thin as a wheat straw tending her small window garden on the fire escape of her rented room ~*~ Someday...some one day... I shall listen to you read these treasures... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Yes..I'm with Sunshine... If only we could listen to you read one of these. Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
*smile* I think you nailed this one! They are still around, just mostly unemployed. It is surprising how friendly they can be. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
great thought... well said another one for the book |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
wranx There will always be Gods in the mind of man. Enjoyed |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Methinks ye know the answers to thine own questions, Dear Zeus!  I raise a toast with sweet nectar to the resurgence of the gods & goddesses! EA |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
What an incredible write! *S* I love this unique perspective... think I'll watch more closely. *S* |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
standing O |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Bro? absolutely fabulous writing...keep em comin baby. Maree  adding this to my library. The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
this is good! i only wish you had kept writing . . . i'm sure you offended a few by failing to mention their glorious post scripts! Rf |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
This is very creative and an interesting write. Enjoyed. Susan The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
Sh'ma Yisrael Adonai Elohaynu Adonai Echad. Hear, Israel, the L-rd is our G-d, the L-rd is One. Barukh Shem k'vod malkhuto l'olam va-ed Blessed be the Name of His glorious kingdom for ever and ever V-ahavta et Adonai Elohecha b-chol l'vavcha u-v-chol naf'sh'cha u-v-chol m'odecha. And you shall love the L-rd your G-d with all your heart and with all your soul and with all your might. V-hayu ha-d'varim ha-ayleh asher anochi m'tzav'cha ha-yom al l'vavecha. And these words that I command you today shall be in your heart. V-shinantam l-vanecha, v-dibarta bam b-shivt'cha b-vaytecha, u-v-lecht'cha ba-derech, u-v-shachb'cha u-v-kumecha. And you shall teach them diligently to your children, and you shall speak of them when you sit at home, and when you walk along the way, and when you lie down and when you rise up. U-k'shartam l'ot al yadecha, v-hayu l-totafot bayn aynecha. And you shall bind them as a sign on your hand, and they shall be for frontlets between your eyes. U-chtavtam al m'zuzot baytecha u-vi-sharecha. And you shall write them on the doorposts of your house and on your gates. Ed this is the Shema a very important prayer to me as a Jew. I thought you may enjoy this prayer. I also wanted to correct a statement that was made by one of your fans...Hebrew can not be translated properly online. But there are great sites that can help you learn Hebrew if you wish to learn. Again Great work!!! Enjoyed Shalom |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"Do you think they quietly accepted their pensions and checked themselves into a retirement home to spend eternity reliving tales of the good old days over endless games of Pinochle?" I often find the thoughts you poetically ponder still hanging around my head...hours, sometimes days, later. Very cool write Ed...as always.  |
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MovesInSilence Member
since 2004-03-21
Posts 111Perth, Australia |
"Or Venus, does she yet accept offerings and sacrifices? Bruises on her thighs just visible below her too tight skirt and a weary lostness, visible in the harsh light of neon" Does she do 2dollar fridays ? very much enjoyed this one. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Perhaps one of them writes poetry under the pen name of wranx? Me thinks thou is a god among poets with this verse.  |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Wranx, I'm reading your box about constructive critiques; I'm glad that "it's not just one of those passing things like bowling or decoupage." Your writing radiates wisdom in such a pleasant, unforced manner. It's always a treat to uncover its riches. Sadie |
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