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vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

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Somewhere... out there...

0 posted 2004-05-29 01:17 AM

~*Soul'ar Eclipse*~

She stands in open view, yet seen by none
While praying one will notice soul's eclipse
Though most feel only calm of warming sun
Within her heart, the storm would capsize ships

None look, with naked eyes, upon her grief
For fear they may be captured in its wake
A few may offer shoulder of relief
Yet no one sees her spirit slowly break

Beyond her guise of 'happy and content'
She slowly drowns with falling of each tear
And though no sound she utters of lament
Her heart pleads silently for one to hear

She stands in open view, yet seen by none
And prays someone will look beyond the sun

-Vicky L. Raynes

*Repost... because...

"When the power of love overcomes the love
of power the world will know peace."
--Jimi Hendrix

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

1 posted 2004-05-29 02:02 AM

I loved it the first time I read it, and I still love it. You're my hero Mum

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

2 posted 2004-05-29 02:52 AM

Oh Vicky, vicky this is soooooo beautiful I could see her there too.

Maree

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

MGROVES

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since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

3 posted 2004-05-29 03:06 AM

this made me cry. i can feel this. dont know what to say. thanks

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2004-05-29 03:21 AM

very nice...I can relate to her

muted

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since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

5 posted 2004-05-29 03:21 AM

GlisteningRain
Member

since 2004-05-06

Posts 103
The clouds

6 posted 2004-05-29 05:34 AM

sadness

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

7 posted 2004-06-01 09:39 AM

Gads, girl, I needed this....

thank you, once again!

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

8 posted 2004-06-01 10:47 AM

Vicky -- ouch, such a sad one, but in your usual style, so very well said. ....jo

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

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Realms of Light

9 posted 2004-06-01 12:33 PM

A wonderfully innovative title, Ms Vicky!

~ and your beautiful soul eclipses that of many with writes such as this!

Loving Light,
Linda

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

10 posted 2004-06-01 05:45 PM

Wonderful writing Vicky

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

11 posted 2004-06-01 08:17 PM

Vicky

I'm so glad to see this wonderful poem! It touches me with a familiar ache. I miss you!

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

12 posted 2004-06-01 10:55 PM

too

repost away...........

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

13 posted 2004-06-02 12:41 PM

She stands in open view, yet seen by none
And prays someone will look beyond the sun
=========================

dont know which I love more...that closing couplet, or that very cool title...the word play is poetic perfection.
A soulful write Vicky-girl...good to see you posting your lovely ryhmes.

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

14 posted 2004-06-02 10:37 AM

Perfect Vicky!!

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

15 posted 2004-06-02 10:38 AM

Fantastic Vicky!! Love this indeed!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

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