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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
She waited out of frame until spark fell within her pleasure, then seeking her favor and a word on which to hang, I reckoned again the balance of familiarity between us noting my own affection for the unlikely watching as she, silver sleek and tossed about my senses until all was a blur of dramatic proportion, the breathless I love you’s of a thousand urgent lips capering scarlet over yesterday’s desire, and I, reclined and reckoning myself not so much sated as restless with the dance, eye shadowed each step reflexively. Measure rising to seduction, a tablature of sequined echoes pause in drape of shoulder’s caress, falling notes here and there as eye wishes to be hand and I wish only this dream of her continue. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Duncan You got me wishing for you too. LOL |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
wishes and dreams can come true |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Such excellent wordage here Duncan...Superb. TD |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"Measure rising to seduction, a tablature of sequined echoes pause in drape of shoulder’s caress, falling notes here and there" The music you write here is gorgeous -- go for it!  ....jo |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
as she, silver sleek and tossed about my senses until all was a blur of dramatic proportion, the breathless I love you’s of a thousand urgent lips capering scarlet over yesterday’s desire, Wow! Amazing and I am slipping this beauty into my library. Chris  Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Measure rising to seduction, a tablature of sequined echoes pause in drape of shoulder’s caress, falling notes here and there as eye wishes to be hand and I wish only this dream of her continue." Damn..... Duncan your writing is growing in leaps and bounds!! This is utterly amazing... I also love the part my sister Nightshade chose as well. May I beg for more please? Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Ya know Duncan, every line reads like a lullaby, rocking back and forth so sweetly. But I loved your title most of all! It's good to see you getting off the porch, or is it that you are spending more time there, in order to write this way? (whatever)  This is awful pretty, and makes me happy too, for you. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 Marco Polo and Jiminy are smiling at this write. This poetry glows. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
She waited out of frame until spark fell within her pleasure, then seeking her favor and a word on which to hang, I reckoned again the balance of familiarity between us =========================== watching as she, silver sleek and tossed about my senses until all was a blur of dramatic proportion, the breathless I love you’s of a thousand urgent lips capering scarlet over yesterday’s desire, ============================= Measure rising to seduction, a tablature of sequined echoes pause in drape of shoulder’s caress, falling notes here and there as eye wishes to be hand ============================== As the moth wishes she had your muse... whoa...what an awesome write... once again your vocabulary and phrasing rocks...( guess reading all those books at the same time is paying off) LOL capering scarlet over yesterday’s desire, that will be the coolest line I'll read today.... awesome awesome personifi a tablature of sequined echoes pause in drape of shoulder’s caress, and that will be the close second... both make me wish I had wrote this..yaya your writing has indeed turned a corner... very impressive style here...me likes. hard to believe watching a Shakira video could inspire one so much..lmao  We believe the past could be undone...but time always reveals ... |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Duncan, This is an amazing write, so full of longing mixed with the paradox of despair and hopefulness....and your language, really nice...~P |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I've got a lot of catching up to do...thought I would start with one of the better ways to go about it... |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Duncan, you've been holding out on me. *chuckles* excellent! ~Tier |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
May such dreams become your reality! So expressive and sensual ~ a joy to read! Don't stay away so long, Dear Poet! Warm hugs, EA |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
not Shakira??? Ok...Fantasia doing the Bobo??? |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
And Duncan dreams the dance of Salome... Awesome write m'friend. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Duncan, fabulous write. The title is perfectly suited, too. Corinne |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
watching as she, silver sleek and tossed about my senses until all was a blur of dramatic proportion Delicate and powerful, all in one. Just love those lines, wish i'd written them. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"noting my own affection for the unlikely" Ah yes.. me to. I love this as you know, and next time? Make the color purple, okay? "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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