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Introspection ad nauseam
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Introspection ad nauseam |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Survey from within has long revealed a tenuous display of province intermixed with pointless regret, resting atop a decaying number of gray celled and shackled matter, which appraises objectively to nil and illuminates my reticence in visiting... yet here I sit in wait of a why that can change nothing, truly perplexed what reason I thought to ask it isn’t possible to unhear what was heard, to sate what was designedly bereft, there is no karmic clause that can return to me a foolish moment spent as her heart’s mistake jading complete I don’t need to believe that I mattered |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
True, introspection can produce nausea....but it doesn't have to. But I have a feeling you've covered both sides of that possibility, folks don't get this deep without it. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Duncan Dog-gone that's the sadist write I've read all day.  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
 I'll be back! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"it isn’t possible to unhear what was heard, to sate what was designedly bereft, there is no karmic clause that can return to me a foolish moment spent as her heart’s mistake jading complete I don’t need to believe that I mattered" Looks like the porch puppy has been doing some deep thinking. Love this Dunc...good to read you again. Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
a tenuous display of province intermixed with pointless regret, resting atop a decaying number of gray celled and shackled matter, which appraises objectively to nil and illuminates my reticence in visiting... ================================= it isn’t possible to unhear what was heard, to sate what was designedly bereft, there is no karmic clause that can return to me a foolish moment spent as her heart’s mistake ====================================== OK??? Who gave Duncan a dictionary????  again with the big words!! how cool is this. Im loving the vocab and verbiage ... a tenuous display of province appraises objectively to nil illuminates my reticence sate what was designedly bereft, there is no karmic clause I love those lines and phrasing... rolled off me mothy tongue with smooth assonance.... oh and that last one? "karmic clause" yeppers...it counts as a litterbation.  ya know Dunc...I didnt even know you had "reticence" LOL ... but this...... resting atop a decaying number of gray celled and shackled matter, this I knew you had... LMAO hehehe  ok...all porch puppy teasing aside... you know I'm feeling the ache of this write...me thinks ya think too much. *S* but then we just do, dont we......... intermixed with pointless regret, it isn’t possible to unhear what was heard, a foolish moment spent as her heart’s mistake jading complete I don’t need to believe that I mattered ================== yep...feeling those lines for sure. Quite the poignant write Dunc.... me thinks ya need a distraction... Im fresh outta blondes...will this work? ~~~~~ ~~~~~ ~~~~~ ~~~~~ ~~~~~ ~~~~~  yeah... all better now... heh (nee nur nee nur) |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hi Duncan,   I sure have missed you. Where ya been?? Oh, and I liked your poem, but I always like your writing. Hugs,  |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Dunc, Seems you got it all from JM. Talk about deep AND good. You're still "the man" and if you're paying attention, the ladies know. Excellent sir, just excellent. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I was so overjoyed to see the write, I knew I'd be back. Yes, we could let JM say it all this time... but we won't.  The depth of this poem says you're beyond caring what others think of your poetry... you're going to write, regardless. No more games. Time for the big boys to come and take heed. Big girls, too. When one pulls from the gut, as you have... THAT'S what it is all about. I'm still trying. After a rite of write like this, you should be exhausted, and I wouldn't blame you if the Big Dog has to take a bit of a nap. This pulled out all the stops, Dunc. I'm danged proud of you. VERY! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
a foolish moment spent as her heart’s mistake that's such a fine line that works both ways....love it, love it!!! Questions and answers are a dangerous subject, but since I have a headache.... I won't yank your chain, just yet!!!! Ya really gotta get off the porch Dunc, you've got too much talent to waste. I'll even throw ya a bone, if you're good.  Feel special now??? |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
As a fellow over thinker, I can appreciate this poem. Excellent. Susan The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Kari said: "Time for the big boys to come" ya know what that means??? |
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J.Samm Member
since 2004-01-12
Posts 415Iloilo City, Philippines |
jading complete I don’t need to believe that I mattered tsk...tsk... simply tears my heart apart. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
cool write |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Laughing my rear end off, in the realization that you have written here....ALL that I have ever tried to write. And yes, JM has it covered. neeners and all. |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
yet here I sit in wait of a why that can change nothing, truly perplexed what reason I thought to ask it isn’t possible to unhear what was heard, to sate what was designedly bereft, Knowing nothing can be done, is a feeling that should be put to death. You sum it all up here dunc, the helpless flailing in the dark. keeping this...even though it takes me to somewhere i want to forget. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I wanted to give a response befitting the words and quickly realized I wasn't capable.. Introspection can really stink..and there is such a thing as overkill... Walls are hard to tear down and the past even harder...Some are just to tainted to step away from the screaming of it all. Now I just know I am going to be getting an email.  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" ~Sarah McLachlan~ |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
And you said "I" was hiding the best stuff! ~Houdini *poof* |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"it isn’t possible to unhear what was heard, to sate what was designedly bereft, there is no karmic clause that can return to me a foolish moment spent as her heart’s mistake" Nothing much I can add to all the above comments, except......my own W O W ! Good to see you 'round again.  .....jo |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
"it isn’t possible to unhear what was heard, to sate what was designedly bereft, there is no karmic clause that can return to me a foolish moment spent as her heart’s mistake" Feeling this with you, Duncan....this is such an honest look inside...I like that and this, alot! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I'd send you a tofu puppy treat, but since you don't eat tofu, what good would it do? Wanna horse laugh instead? LOL Seriously, this is one helluvagood naked write, Dunc. Looks good on you. Ok, I'll go back out to the barn and leave you alone. But I am keeping this write. BTW, there is a young redheaded filly here in town who looks lonely, but I won't tell her about you. |
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