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GlisteningRain
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The clouds

0 posted 2004-05-26 03:52 AM



When I hold a grain of sand in my hand
I cry rain
the sky bland with fakeness
Fanning her face I erase this space
hard
heating killer hearts of a card that rend others
don't understand
the elastic band of my blood
beating through my brain
seeing insane
irritation at the world's iodine
ingrained inside my wound
remained the pain
soon peeling me away
blind shots for her
poor me
pour me out to bleed
these tears flow and only I know
the years when fear turns to yeast

Spilling obsession smoothly over soft eyes
a soft site sublime
hands move divine light
this moment gone
pierced by an ivory tooth
lands collide through rainbow realms
and I dream of dragons
dividing sun sets by moonlight in their iris's
cream colored canvas's paralell with truth
expanding Godspeed to revolve haste
I chase myself inside a thought
Watching me run
Outside of what I am

© Copyright 2004 Byron Landry Jr. - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
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displaced
1 posted 2004-05-26 04:26 AM


this sounds painful


Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2004-05-26 11:24 AM


ByronLandry~

'I chase myself inside a thought'

I find this poetic line very-much to my liking~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
3 posted 2004-05-26 11:27 AM


like Marge I love these words  among oters:

I chase myself inside a thought
Watching me run
Outside of what I am

great work

M

GlisteningRain
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The clouds
4 posted 2004-05-26 02:40 PM


^_^
rosepetals25
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5 posted 2004-05-26 03:03 PM




I have to agree with Marge and nakdthoughts, I really like those lines as well.

Tara  

Saunni
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6 posted 2004-05-26 11:38 PM


Such a creative write, I can't pick a line that I like the best. I like it all!

Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain.

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