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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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she hangs there querulously without guts and ado cowardly prying into the conversation of sensitive new age guys, or girls even they all look the same sitting below her at the cold silvery café setting s.n.a.g.s her own reflection mocks her she is flowerless all pointy and spaced like dodgy teeth her tendrils fall from the roots of her soiled beginning green and burnt-out with growing sighing her breath is like a dilapidated breeze and tries to comb through their carefully structured gelatinous maiden hair The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I see this...I see it, sense it, feel it... this is good, Maree...very good.... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent Maree.... Love this!! Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
A very interesting write! ~ and I mean "interesting" in a most flattering way!   EA |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
this describes a world outside my own, and yet, interestingly enough, I kind of "get it". Interesting read, and yes, I too mean that in a good way. Smiles -- Susan The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
her tendrils fall from the roots of her soiled beginning green and burnt-out with growing sighing her breath is like a dilapidated breeze ============================= these are some of the most unique and cool personifis and images!! how cool is this: from the roots of her soiled beginning "soiled beginning" whoa................  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Karilea, Nancy, Earth Angel and Susan.... thank you so much for your kind words ladies, you're all so very lovely and much appreciated. Maree  The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey Janet, you snuck in on my as I was replying... thank you so very very much. I always love to see you here Maree The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
I love this |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
So good...so very good. You have a fine eye, my friend. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what a picture painted! |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
YOU know, ya know? how much i like this |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
you always write with a depth I have yet to discover...very much enjoyed, Maree *s M |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Thank you all so very much for your kind and generous replies  Maree. The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree You are so unique and clear at the same time...an amazing use of words with a view! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
sighing her breath is like a dilapidated breeze and tries to comb through their carefully structured gelatinous maiden hair Oh my, Maree, what a wonderful vision you have! *applause* |
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