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Open Poetry #32

Rock Slide ZZ13

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2004-05-25 07:56 AM

Under sky blue pale
The road became a wide trail,
Then narrows in half,
And became a well worn path.

Rocks and stone galore
Made the narrow path no more
Blocked from his walking
He began careful climbing
Till passage was made
Sitting there resting he stayed.

A white cloud drifted
Shaped like a seagull in flight
His spirit lifted
As moist eyes followed the sight
He thought of the sea
Which he might not see
Ever again now
Except in a cloud.

A hawk in a tree
Screeching to an unseen mate
Then flew from the tree
Some appetite yet to sate
The gull broke apart
And he resumed his journey;
There deep in his heart
The seagull he could still see
Ever again now
Even in a cloud

Gloom

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

1 posted 2004-05-25 08:35 AM

Professor,
   Again, your writing amazes me!  You establish the setting and the events or thoughts practically happen by themselves.
You leave a lot of open space for the reader to draw from own experience.  Such a gift you have.
        Sadelite

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

2 posted 2004-05-25 09:14 AM

Thank you, Sadelite
You are kind in your praise for my humble words,
If you wish to see the series as it has developed,
This link : The Poetic Story of Zhan Zhing
Should take you there.

Gloom

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

3 posted 2004-05-25 09:41 AM

Oh yes...link me baby!!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2004-05-25 09:45 AM

Professor,
Enjoyed the read.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2004-05-25 12:58 PM

thanks for the link Gloom!

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

6 posted 2004-05-25 01:09 PM

Freedom embodies wings without a compass, just a knowing in the heart...
Nice write.
TD

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