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Cloud War . . . . Haiku
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Cloud War . . . . Haiku |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Cloud War Chunks of sky rain down. Under battleship gray clouds, Huge guns of thunder. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
RatL -- How perceptive and comparative of the now! You are so clever.......jo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sounds like an awesome storm! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Some vision! Perfectly rendered. Love, Margherita |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ratleader Good one,  |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
RatL., Strong and frightening. I'm glad to see you posting more... Take care, Sadie |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
And that's the way it's been around here for the past few days. Excellent Ed! ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I usually cruise through a museum... looking quickly and moving on. But then I'll find a painting that holds me rapt for ages... as I try to absorb every detail. I read poetry in much the same way... by now, I should be used to the way time stops when I read your words. *S* If you're going to write so vividly, you really should furnish umbrellas. *S* This is superb!!! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Nicely done. Haiku is quite tough to do well. You did it well! Corinne |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Oh yes, this is how it was this weekend! I can hear the thunder in this. Smiles -- Susan The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Excellent!  ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, |
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Kazm Member
since 2003-11-13
Posts 99 |
This is the next thing I want to learn, mine are so bad I wouldn't put them here. That is especially embarassing for someone named Kazuo! |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
You are good my friend, if I may call you that. Robert |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Ed, you are very good at these...but you are at anything that you write!! Hugs,  |
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pictureme Member
since 2003-11-28
Posts 248Ohio, USA |
Great job with this...haiku. Takes a special someone to give this form life and you have done it! nice job, pictureme :-) |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Thunder cannonade jagged light missiles lance down Earth: acquired target Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed The rain was so gentle this morning...yet something in me heard and saw a sky like this, raw and open and wounded in battle. Thank you for expressing it.  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
When the sky is full of clouds and free time is mine it can be interesting watching the clouds laying on my back on the grass...James |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
I've always really loved your haiku. |
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