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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Shadowland He calls to only me so quietly so soft come and I ache with aches indescribable, the pain so freshly wrought. He cries out to me, beseeching, so quietly, come to me In shadows he stands, I reach and fail to reach and shed silent tears, weeping only he hears come to me, my love and would I do anything give anything lose everything to once again go to him come to me Yes I would, I would sacrifice all to once again lay in his arms hear his heart beat touch warm skin come O, my love… |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh my...this is one huge SIGH! So full of longing and love.. Beautifully penned m'friend. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Wow. Just wow. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine  a keeper. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Sunshine, the pull of the shadows is very strong in this one and crosses my path every now and then, too. This one got me...... jo |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
This dude better get the wax out of his ears before someone else shows up. Nicely passionate Sun, nicely indeed. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very powerful and emotional piece...I know the feeling |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
This leaves me (nearly!) speechless in it's depth, power and beauty. Eric |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Poignantly and powerfully expressed. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Simply gorgeous. Okay, beuatiful. Okay, lovely. Okay, that and all of the above. Smiles -- Susan The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
A beautiful and delicate poem, Sunshine, with just the right touch of longing and desire in the lines. I would question the use of the word "hie". ALthough it fits it doesn't really go with the rest of the poem and gives the impression that the word is being used only to challenge the reader and not for the poem's sake. Just an opinion of mine. The poem is terrific.... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Good suggestion, Sir...thank you. Made a change. Thanks to all who have read... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
A hushed sigh.. beautiful m'dear. Maree  The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..you certainly enliven this poem; very, very nice.. spiros ------------ |
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