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majnu
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0 posted 2004-05-22 03:27 AM


need

the most common human emotion,
even with all my friends
at a party of near hundred,
it manages to creep up,
the back of my neck
into my ear
through my head
down my throat
to my chest
and grabs my heart with thin, icy, fingers.

I understand the priests now,
its not the celibacy,
rather the lack of
perfume on the pillow beside me,
a warm hand behind my head,
softness contrasting my hardness,
clutter to fill spartan space,
transducer:
rage, anger, aggression
to
love;

and a resigned sigh ushers in
silence.


© Copyright 2004 Zaheer Abbas Ali - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-05-22 04:38 AM


"I understand the priests now,
its not the celibacy,
rather the lack of
perfume on the pillow beside me,"

I, too, think sometimes, it's better not to entertain the dreams of what might never be.

But only sometimes.

More often I think, what the hell else have I got to do?



Loved the thoughtfulness here, maj.

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2 posted 2004-05-22 04:54 AM


oh youve written of it so well
...yeah, need, need,need...*sigh*

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3 posted 2004-05-22 05:22 AM


not really sure what to say here but wow
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4 posted 2004-05-23 02:00 AM


This was a very interesting piece -- I enjoyed your style.  
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5 posted 2004-05-23 11:32 PM


Excellent...James
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6 posted 2004-05-23 11:57 PM


Truth here, much truth in an excellent package. Well done!

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7 posted 2004-05-24 01:55 AM


sighing with you, understanding that feeling
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8 posted 2004-05-24 06:16 AM


"need" yes you've bundled it all up wonderfully.

Most enjoyed.

Maree

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

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