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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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The river is in a rush; it spills over banks without a care for our sliding feet. See how it climbs trees? It ferries them away inside a brown belly to thrust trunks into the ocean. Do you remember when this was a brook? It was quieter then. There was time to dip our toes in thought. I was young and raced past; the future was waiting for me. Your face was a blur of concern. We are as we were then, on opposite banks, except I am the voice of caution. I will worry these hands in mud to convince myself words somehow heal. We are both sliding beneath the surface. I can’t change the currents, but I will hold on as long as your fingers clasp mine. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I wish I could sit beside you listen to you learn from you. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Ah, Karilea, you are too kind to me! But thank you for being so, you are an angel! I'm sure that we could learn much from each other! Corinne |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I don't think she's kind at all...I think she spoke truthfully, from the heart, words I wish I had used because I feel the same as her...this was philosophy, zen, momma, lessons learned and praticed - and something for us all. Kudos... jwesley |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
See? What James said...  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very touching...love the ending |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Yes I wish what Karilea wished for. Really incredible writing Corinne. IWIHWT Maree  Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Excellent imagery/metaphor. A true delight to read! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Corinne Your poetry always hits on some truth that is for many, always lovely, you are, and thought filled. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"We are as we were then, on opposite banks, except I am the voice of caution. I will worry these hands in mud to convince myself words somehow heal." Exactly, Corinne, I can always relate to your words. M |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"I can’t change the currents, but I will hold on as long as your fingers clasp mine." Love how you word things Corinne. Much enjoyed the read. Hugs~ To have lived the dream of a love so true... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
We are as we were then, on opposite banks, except I am the voice of caution. I will worry these hands in mud to convince myself words somehow heal. always my friend..a pleasure to read.. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you very much, jwesley! Karilea: you make me smile, lady. Thank you for that and the constant encouragement. Thanks passing shadows! Maree, thank you! Thanks Grover! Thank you Martie. I still love reading the world through your magical eyes. Thank you, M! Enchantress, thank you! Hi Ron, thank you kindly, sir! Corinne |
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