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Open Poetry #32

Shake Her Like A Polaroid Picture

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

0 posted 2004-05-18 01:05 AM

Shake Her Like
A Polaroid Picture

I never knew I
would fall so
hard for her,
Who ever does?
To me it's like
listening to a record
over and over again.
The best one's start
to grow on you.
The first time you
already know you like it,
still it takes a
while to be sure.
Well, now I'm sure.
Suzie, if you
only knew how I
feel about you,
it would shake
you to your bones.

JamesLee
May18
2004

JamesLee

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

1 posted 2004-05-18 01:28 AM

Gorgeous, Michael! Great analogy!

...jo

[This message has been edited by iliana (05-19-2004 03:03 AM).]

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
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2 posted 2004-05-18 03:26 AM

this is precious!

JL
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since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

3 posted 2004-05-18 05:23 PM

Good one James!

JL

She said: ”You look cute in the dark.”

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2004-05-19 12:50 PM

Thank you iliana, passing shadows and JL for the nice responses...James

Bonnie j
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since 2003-06-27

Posts 1588
Ohio

5 posted 2004-05-19 09:12 AM

Your title is a real eye catcher.
I was bringing up a picture of this in my mind. Now when I take a Polaroid I kind of swing it up and down like a swing and maybe twirl around. Boy if I did that to a person they might wind up in a tree.LOL
Good Jobber
BonBon

choshi
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since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

6 posted 2004-05-19 10:45 AM

James,

Great write....playful yet strong and heartfelt....~P

Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10

Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla

7 posted 2004-05-19 11:14 AM

very nice

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....

Corinne
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since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

8 posted 2004-05-20 11:48 AM

How senusous, James!

one nit:

The best one's start

(there should be no apostophe on one's -
it's plural non-possesive).
Corinne

Ericc
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since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

9 posted 2004-05-20 01:51 PM

Great write!

Eric

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

10 posted 2004-05-21 12:12 PM

Thank you Bonnie, choshi, Foxy, Corinne and Ericc for the nice responses...Corinne I tried to edit it but it was too late...English was not my best subject...did I even have a best subject...I think it was girl watching...James

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