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Greenbelt, 3 A.M.
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Greenbelt, 3 A.M. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Greenbelt, 3 A.M. blue shadows sooth this concrete path, blend its hardness to a pastel dark meander down through the moonlit grass he comes here in the darkness time when the street won’t spit him out and no house welcomes this curving path expects him now, still warm somehow from the day as he rolls along it he swings a little, side to side, a private dance to music no one hears, music born inside, a future memory like the call of shadows and grass, like a still, moon-softened walkway, like a home found, within |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
he swings a little, side to side, a private dance to music no one hears, music born inside, a future memory ~*~ When I read poetry like this, coming from a man, I realize how close to woman he really is... in all of the important ways. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Good morning, Sunshine! Yes, and that's something I've learned only in the last year and a half....since PIP and all that's gone with it. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
he swings a little, side to side, a private dance to music no one hears, music born inside, a future memory this brings to mind, the spirtual oneness we all share, and give such happiness to read that others dare express and are not afraid to know...which means you have strong willed convictions... Brilliant and awesome...love your wrights. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Then I would say, Sir...do not let anyone take your passion for writing creations such as this, away from you. I sense a rebirth, and a renewal. And I look forward to more gems from your pen, and mind. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
It just doesn't get better than this. *S* The images are striking and superb... the personification is perfect... the way you move from streets spitting him out to curving path's expectation is no less than brilliant. *S* he swings a little, side to side, a private dance to music no one hears, music born inside, a future memory like the call of shadows and grass, like a still, moon-softened walkway, like a home found, within But it's when you move to the personal that this becomes one of my very favorites, to be tucked into my library for future memories... for you could as easily be describing a poet and his poetry... I love the last line! *S* |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed Your eye is so sensitive when it loves the page like this. It is so good to see you posting again...I've missed you!  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
blue shadows sooth this concrete path, blend its hardness to a pastel dark meander down through the moonlit grass he comes here in the darkness time when the street won’t spit him out and no house welcomes this curving path expects him now, still warm somehow from the day ===================================== ya had me from the first verse.... superb write of imagery and expression. I need a path like this...one that leads me to the ocean. very well done as always poet sir... good to have you back in the blue. I love you more the further I go ... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
still in awe of you |
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