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Walking in Your Shadow
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Walking in Your Shadow |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving 
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we found you sleeping and wrapped you in rusted gown in deliverance to higher ground waiting for the cricket's song to sing you home reborn with Dhamma on your tongue and nothing less than kamma in your breast, beating in sync to the rhythms that still remain connecting your universe to mine allowing me to believe our paths still share every stone, leaving me only one step behind... to walk in the shadow of enlightenment. ` ` ` ` `in remembrance of my brother |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
The heart of it, methinks "with Dhamma on your tongue and nothing less than kamma in your breast, beating in sync to the rhythms that still remain connecting your universe to mine" |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Dawn, your beautiful words show that you still share the path ... unseen, but deeply felt is his presence. Love, Margherita  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very touching  but sort of sad |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
yes, i still feel the sadness, he died at the age of 16, he is my youngest sibling..i feel the sadness so clearly at times i must force myself to remember that it is counter productive to continue grieving...i know he still exists and is setting an example for me to follow. the lines wranx chose are exactly what he says it is "the heart of the poem". im undisciplined...thanking all of you for allowing me to be selfish...for this moments lingering. as i said, i still walk in the shadow of enlightenment...one day i hope to walk beside it.  I was inspired by a loss of words, |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh this aches, you write so beautifully. Maree The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
it's easy to tell you were very close Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
wonderful tribute - your love shines through |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
, leaving me only one step behind... to walk in the shadow of enlightenment. What a powerful and loving tribute to your brother....Both sad and also full of optimism. Sometimes I wonder if lights cast shadows or if shadows cast light....maybe both?  ~P |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Such tenderess and love in the gentle beauty of this poem. Susan |
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Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
beautiful and gentle and mournful all at once... It is okay to grieve, even when we think we should let it go. I think in some ways, when we lose someone we love, we never stop grieving. ~*Krista Lee Knutson*~ |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
The sun must illuminate for a shadow to exist. Walking in Your Shadow shows so much togetherness. Your poem touched me. Sadie |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
dont ever apologise for being undisciplined or selfish in regards to poetry that is what it is all about we write us... naked this is beautiful keep it up |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Truly enlightened poetry -- you do walk in the light dear muted one cuted one brave heart! ....jo |
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