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A Lonely Breath (Part 1?)
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A Lonely Breath (Part 1?) |
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LucidityNow Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 118Canada |
A Lonely Breath A lonely breath is taken Despairing the dreaded morrow A world decayed and shaken Even at best, replete with sorrow And in its darkest hours Sitting withered in his place An old man seethingly scours Eyes fixed, on his untied bootlace 'Tis been one week since he took his seat Not food nor water consumed The scraps of his mind, those not deplete Have convinced him, he is doomed 'Twas he who chose this tortured death From this wretched earth exiled And as he takes its final breath His face twists to a smile and i'm certain that if i drive into those trees, it would make less of a mess, than she's made of me... |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Wow. Excellent write. Really drew me in. JL  She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
love the rhyme scheme here! well done! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Smilin... It is the little details of living that hold the most happiness...huh? TD |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Jesse -- Wow, this is captivating! I'll be watching for Part 2.  |
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LucidityNow Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 118Canada |
ty, hopefully part 2 tommorow and i'm certain that if i drive into those trees, it would make less of a mess, than she's made of me... |
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