Open Poetry #32 |
Sticks and Stones ZZ11 |
Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
The gully was dry No rains came to wash the stones It was a cloudless sky As Zhan walked alone. The path was clear Only his feet made human sounds No dwellings were near As the sun slid down. Stones formed in a ring To hold the small pile of sticks A fire to bring To light his small candle’s wick, Making wood to embers Zhan heats water in his cup While he remembers An elegant of a sup. Minister came to the capital then All those outside towns came in Ducks and wine on every table They all ate as much as able Partook in every food in sight From dusk to the morning light. Half the water tea A pinch of salt for the rice A sunset to see Sugar in the tea was nice Embers glowing dim Reflecting the red twilight This day’s walk would end Sleeping under stars of night The night chill woke him His fire was almost out Tossing more sticks in Zhan Zhing chanced to glance about Half a moon in sky Climbing above the mountain The breeze was a sigh So pulled his coat about him. Gloom |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Professor, I'd say an ordinary day. LOL enjoyed. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I am most certainly enjoying these vignettes of Zhan's life, Professor... thank you. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I enjoyed the scene. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
another day in the life *click* |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Simple...basic...and full to the brim TD |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I really like the character and looking through his eyes. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Reading them one right after another and this one was such a contrast from the last.. Excellent writing! "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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