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An Ode to Hermit Crabs
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An Ode to Hermit Crabs |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA 
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My Muse is a little testy tonight........ I’ve read all day until my eyes have bled Listened to the many, many talking heads And all I know is absolutely null. The universe is much too vast, too tall To understand it all. I’ve interviewed the ones who know the best Who told me truth I cannot put to rest And all I know is absolutely null. The universe is much too vast, too tall To comprehend it all. I’ve dug through archives of Egypt’s ancient tombs. Watched the frothed tide's pull upon the moon And all I know is absolutely nada. The universe is vast, why the bother? The notion of enlightenment is worthy But which horse won last week’s derby? The universe is much too vast, way too tall. I am but a grain of sand drowning on the shore, covered with sea weed and more, waiting for Poseiden's command to change the tide and lay me on dry land, exposed, again unsheltered, d e -- r a n g e d. Hermit crabs, I understand. [This message has been edited by iliana (05-14-2004 12:20 PM).] |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
Smarty Jones is the winner! I enjoyed the way you analogized your feelings... but please, don't ever feel like something like seaweed or hermit crabs for that is much the same.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is incredible! |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
enjoyed this. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Opeth, you're a sweetie! I don't really feel like this although I am somewhat of a hermit -- in reality, it's more like I am holding a seive and sifting the sand if you know what I mean. My work requires me to interview people and do a lot of reading and watching news, thus the talking heads.  and thanks for post. .......jo[This message has been edited by iliana (05-14-2004 03:54 AM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Dixie --  thank you for the "incredible" -- wow, I'll tell my muse although he/she (mine is nongendered) is really aggravated tonight -- maybe I should wait 'til tomorrow! lol |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
MGROVES -- thank you, glad you did. Apologies for my muse's kind of sour tone tonight -- she/he (whatever) needs to get out and have some fun -- and lighten up a little! |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
 OMgosh this is sooo good Jo!!Loved the way you did this... and remember: we dont need to know much, knowing ourselves is enough ......even if we are a little "crabby" LOL |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Hey there muted cuted one -- lol -- yes, I agree that knowing ourselves is enough! Don't know what's going on with musie tonight..... .....jo |
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akforty7 Junior Member
since 2004-01-10
Posts 18 |
all i can say is "wow!" |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
akforty7 -- thanks for posting and for the "wow." I'm flattered....  |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
nicely written... Regards sudhir P.S. maybe you were thinking of the word "Poseidon"... not sure about mythology myself |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
know this feeling...expressed well Jo....  ~~**~~ |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
you and me, the hermit crab, the tree, the stone, the gull.........all just crawling ants beneath the smiling sun |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Jo...a masterpiece....tend to be a hermit crab myself...guilty  Loved this poem. |
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forne_marin Member
since 2004-04-13
Posts 140Spartanburg, South Carolina |
Very nice. Good rhythm, and a great metaphor. Keep up the good work! I believe the most important component of a poem is rhythm. Rhythm is the heartbeat of a poem. It is what makes poetry poetry. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Ah for the life of a hermit crab, where I can be alone and people expect me to be crabby. Lovely expression in this. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
iliana, Loved this one. I really liked your first verse and how you led from there to the sand and hermit crab. Yes, sure it is a vast and tall uni verse or, better yet, perhaps a multi-verse! Take care, Love, Sadie |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
This is so wonderful and I have read and re-read it many times this day. You are an amazing writer. Hugs, Marti If you truly love Nature, you will find |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Jo, a testy muse is better than no muse at all. A pondering write. I shall have my sisters think on this one. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
iliana I really enjoyed this...the humor and the wisdom...an unbeatable combination!! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
This reminds me of a hectic day when you feel like you have been tugged in every direction at one time.....yelling "ENUFFF!!" |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Sure glad you understand them, my friend . . . me, I'm still talking to them and trying . . . jwesley |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
and I was looking for crab meat from the beginning..hehe, nice! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
You all overwhelm me with your kind and lively comments! ....jo |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...my girlfriend is in to seafood...James |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
James -- lol -- thanks for that reply. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
iliana, What a gem! I'm glad I popped in on this. Doc |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
LOL Jo, I know what you mean....my muse hasn 't been herself/himself lately either....kinda crabby feeling too. ahahahhaha That's so cute. Thank you for the smile, sweet lady.  Hugs, Ethel |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
Yes, a well-written masterpiece. I agree indeed. I really like this one! Kevin |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
The more we know, the less we understand. For me it isn't that I don't know, but that I don't know why! Nice job. Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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