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Jet Lag
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Jet Lag |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Jet Lag It is late in the candle store although the fragrance of flowers still simmers under the heavy sky then slowly eases from sidewalks into the delft glazed sea The rain is everywhere even there and under the wooden walkway with its specter of sails and flags I hear the echo of something pushing me to air The wind is in my hair a map across my eyes blown dark where listening is big and slow I can feel the hands of time there and in the last color of sky as day dies slowly I turn into the bitter cold my blossom cheeks against his coat and I think of falling up the wind my boat my hair the sail the sky my ocean past the sun into the morning of someplace else |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...and I think of falling up... ~*~ you know I smiled then, right? |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"slowly I turn into the bitter cold my blossom cheeks against his coat and I think of falling up the wind my boat my hair the sail the sky my ocean past the sun into the morning of someplace else" Oh dear Martie..this has to be one of the best you have ever written. This is a treasure..a keeper for my library. The imagery here is incredible. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Very nice poetry. JL  She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Enjoyed. Susan |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Ah, Martie...you truly do give this experience a "present" feel...as if we were right there with you. It's an honor to watch an artist at work, and you are an artist of true beauty and strength. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
I really love the rain. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DearestSis~ 'The wind is in my hair a map across my eyes blown dark where listening is big and slow I can feel the hands of time there and in the last color of sky as day dies slowly' I simply love the all of it~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
We all should be jet lagged, Martie! This was wonderful! |
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akforty7 Junior Member
since 2004-01-10
Posts 18 |
very nice imagery |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a beautiful write |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
fainting... OMG Martie, O.M.G. Incredible you are. every line just blew me away. IT'S MINE! eheh.. adding to my library. miss you  Mxx The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colours, but the sea, does not change. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Elegant and extremely creative...what wonderful lines...falling up...beautiful Martie...thank you for sharing. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
beautifully penned, Martie... regards sudhir |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
makes me wish I was someplace else, also enjoyed your visions, Martie *s M |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - you poetry continues to paint wonderful images and evoke amazing feelings - you take me along and how I enjoy the travel - loved this - Paul |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
You do this just too, too well. You should be proud. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Simply exquisite imagery and excellent write! Love, Margherita |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
is late in the candle store although the fragrance of flowers still simmers under the heavy sky then slowly eases from sidewalks into the delft glazed sea The rain is everywhere even there and under the wooden walkway with its specter of sails and flags I hear the echo of something pushing me to air =============================== Id of been lacking had I missed this gem of pen.... awesome imagery and personify... your muse rocks even when tired and lagged.  I love you more the further I go ... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Beautiful and silky...James |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
God, what an ending..perfect, perfect |
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