Open Poetry #31 |
Dry Fountain |
Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Where did your water go? On a day so filled with ice and rain The gutters all now overflow And the fountain has no drain. Was it humidity? Or gray and white fur grown thirsty? Gloom |
||
© Copyright 2004 Aszard Drazlom - All Rights Reserved | |||
nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
the water is all on my sidewalk...slick enough to land me ... M |
||
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I see several visions in these few lines... well done, Sir! |
||
iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Where has the water gone? Good question! |
||
passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
just dried up, that's all |
||
ambrish Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 257India |
liked it, so figurative. |
||
Bohemianaus Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 69Australia (South Gippsland) |
wish I knew - we have a drought here. God bless and keep you, Namaste! |
||
Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
It was consumed! Hey, Gloomy, this one was hiding from me! Glad I found it "sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
||
Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
an ah-ha moment... I finally get the part about the gray and white grown thirsy-at least I think I understand it now). There is some science hidden in this that i just couldn't get earlier: Liked the layers... Awesome write. Take care. Sadie |
||
Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
would you mind explaining this a bit? i can see (in my mind) some clashing metaphor / analogies... and then a cat. the wording is interesting, however, and i feel like i'm missing something. |
||
Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Interesting! Grover. |
||
⇧ top of page ⇧ | ||
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. |