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Guardurthoughts
Member

since 2001-10-16

Posts 66

0 posted 2004-01-25 02:59 AM

Shall I trace my life to this point?
Carbon paper my very existence
To such a imaginative detail that it’s transparent
For all that my past is only and ever that.
If you could flip through each page in slow motion,
And watch as I love and listen as I think
Could you even begin to ponder how I became who I am?

Shall I paint the sky as I am now?
Beautiful yet oddly scared by the deep blacks of pain.
So Mixed, so confused that the reds of love become
Intertwined with the vibrant yellows of happiness
So deep shadows of pain creep around each curve.
Would you want to paint your own colors in mine?

Perhaps I shall trace you life, make it transparent for the weakest
Eye to see why I love you. I would sketch in what was lost
And erase all the anguish caused. I would only hope
That one day our past will no longer haunt us but keep
Us content in the security of our love.

~~~Gaurdurthoughts~~~

"the best and most beautiful things cannot be seen,or even touched. they must be felt with the heart"

Michelle_loves_Mike

Senior Member

since 2003-12-20

Posts 1189
Pennsylvania

1 posted 2004-01-25 07:42 AM

Perhaps I shall trace you life, make it transparent for the weakest
Eye to see why I love you. I would sketch in what was lost
And erase all the anguish caused. I would only hope
That one day our past will no longer haunt us but keep
Us content in the security of our love.

this is a wish many have had,,,you come across well,,,,if I may say,,
Michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2004-01-25 09:41 PM

Love the mix of colors you used
and how you painted them true.

Beautiful work!

J.Samm
Member

since 2004-01-12

Posts 415
Iloilo City, Philippines

3 posted 2004-01-25 11:52 PM

if words were colors you have blended them beautifully!

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

4 posted 2004-01-26 05:41 AM

So deep shadows of pain creep around each curve

love this line...nice writing

M

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

5 posted 2004-02-24 12:34 PM

Guardurthoughts -- this was a very interesting poem -- I liked your use of color the theme of painting -- well done!

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