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mytuesdaywishes Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 254a voice from the musicbox 
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you will be my sweetest memory i so wanted to be just like you with your easy confidence and perfect dreams. the things i did to myself just for attention were emotionally exhausting more than damaging. some scars i want to remain forever like the way the rain smells and the hint of a smile on the lips of a feeling i could never know. the clouds breathe fire at each other as i sit on a bus that i've waited for for far too long. i am a landlord for the most brilliant heart. the one who's lived in me never payed their rent. but i only evicted them long after they were gone. i hold onto my inner massochistic moments because we tend to shine the most when we struggle. such beautifully paradoxical creatures we are. i am a sentimental cynic with no way to connect with each minute of my life passing me by. call me sometime let me know you love me more everyday of your life. i cried when i left you although you didn't see it i cried for the smile you wake up with every morning and i cried for the song you left me with and the habits i've knowingly picked up from you. but i laugh when i think of you because i so want to be like you and not care when the light shifts or when people walk away. at the same time i think you could be so great if you only cried a little because you and me we're the same. we tend to shine the most when we struggle. joy has its own justice. and dreams are languid and lawless. and everything bows to beauty, when it's fierce and when it's flawless... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Jeez...I was just thinking of you and BANG! here you are. WOW Rachel... You leave me speechless, the phrasing, the imagery, the ALL of you. it's a keeper  Maree. Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada |
such beautifully paradoxical creatures we are. so true so true. your words speak of wisdom and of hurt,i could feel every word of this like vibrations from your heart. incredible write |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wonderfully done! |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Wow! A superb write... exceptional write! Really like the image, "the clouds breathe fire at each other"  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Whoooooa, the depth of this -- amazing writing!  ......jo |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
some scars i want to remain forever like the way the rain smells and the hint of a smile on the lips of a feeling i could never know. -------------------------------- i am a landlord for the most brilliant heart. the one who's lived in me never payed their rent. but i only evicted them long after they were gone. ==================================== i am a landlord for the most brilliant heart. what a very cool personify and analogy that is. another impressive write from you. |
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