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Professor Gloom
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0 posted 2004-04-08 07:29 AM


If the sunshine had been shining warming me
The sweat could be explained on my tired body,
But I was laying there in bed without sleep
The blanket tossed off covered by just a sheet.
Perhaps the heater had stayed on going haywire
But the cool sixties shouldn’t make me perspire,
It was the stress of the day’s dread reality
Thoughts of what was, was is, and what will be
Mixed with the shutter of if I slept and dreamed
Of a time of walls of fire where the I ran and screamed.
What demon should I fall to in the dark of night
The worrying wake or that old dreaming fright.
The predawn alarm sent me along on my way
From another sleepless night to face the grim of day.

Gloom


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Sunshine
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1 posted 2004-04-08 07:32 AM



Methinks it's the moon...
Seems I had a night like yours
and I said "hurry, light..."
because the dreams were no place
for me to be.


Professor Gloom
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2 posted 2004-04-08 07:37 AM


Thank you, Sunshine

Probably not the moon,
Such an explanation would be a boon
For that was a moonless night,
I agree that dreams no place to be
And I know t’is just a possibility
But that possible is part of the fright.

Always a pleasure to see your responses

Gloom

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3 posted 2004-04-08 07:40 AM


One advantage to a rough night/morning is the rebirth of the birds' song, especially after the threatening thunderous sounds during the night.  Your poem is excellent, as always.  I liked the gloom.  Whoops-did I say that?  ut, oh, I just read the title, "Before the Crowing".  Perhaps, they're yet to sing?  
                      Sadie

LeeJ
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4 posted 2004-04-08 07:44 AM


enriched with visuals that took me to that place....but soon morning arrives, no matter what part of the day...we look back and realize...

Gloom, outstanding write...

Professor Gloom
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5 posted 2004-04-08 07:46 AM


Thank you, Sadelite,
Usually I notice the birdsong, the flowers, the predawn colors of the sky,
But today I just shrugged into my black leather, my black car
And drove through the dimness on the black street
Pleased you liked.

Gloom

Professor Gloom
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6 posted 2004-04-08 07:48 AM


Thank you, LeeJ
I suppose the new day always brings new hope,
At least to most,
But there are times when it’s just another day.
Glad you enjoyed the words

Gloom

Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2004-04-08 08:20 AM


Professor,
Nothing stops a good write, enjoyed.

nakdthoughts
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8 posted 2004-04-08 09:47 AM


must have been a lot warmer by you, last evening...still needed to be quilt covered here

I wish for you some peaceful sleep~

M

Earth Angel
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9 posted 2004-04-08 09:53 AM


Oh, yes! I know what those nights can be like! ~ and I awake from them crowing like a raven instead of my usual chirping like a birdie!  lol

Seriously speaking, Dear Professor, you have a real talent for drawing your readers into your world ~ or the one around you! It ain't always pretty, but it sure is real!

Loves 'n hugs,
EA

ThisDiamond
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10 posted 2004-04-08 04:17 PM


I don't know why this write struck me of Vietnam, but it did.  I have three uncles that served then, and all are thankfully old cantankerous men... Blessed.
But it touched me that way.

Sending you some Michigan air...fills the lungs, cools the sleep...lots of birds.
Once in while the sun comes out...and when it does....It's Glorious Gloom!
TD

iliana
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11 posted 2004-04-11 01:43 AM


Time for a checkup old Gloomy guy!  This has me concerned!     and Happy Easter!
passing shadows
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12 posted 2004-04-11 04:38 AM


you write some of my feelings well
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