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Before the Crowing
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Before the Crowing |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
If the sunshine had been shining warming me The sweat could be explained on my tired body, But I was laying there in bed without sleep The blanket tossed off covered by just a sheet. Perhaps the heater had stayed on going haywire But the cool sixties shouldn’t make me perspire, It was the stress of the day’s dread reality Thoughts of what was, was is, and what will be Mixed with the shutter of if I slept and dreamed Of a time of walls of fire where the I ran and screamed. What demon should I fall to in the dark of night The worrying wake or that old dreaming fright. The predawn alarm sent me along on my way From another sleepless night to face the grim of day. Gloom |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Methinks it's the moon... Seems I had a night like yours and I said "hurry, light..." because the dreams were no place for me to be.  |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Sunshine Probably not the moon, Such an explanation would be a boon For that was a moonless night, I agree that dreams no place to be And I know t’is just a possibility But that possible is part of the fright. Always a pleasure to see your responses Gloom |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
One advantage to a rough night/morning is the rebirth of the birds' song, especially after the threatening thunderous sounds during the night. Your poem is excellent, as always. I liked the gloom. Whoops-did I say that? ut, oh, I just read the title, "Before the Crowing". Perhaps, they're yet to sing? Sadie |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
enriched with visuals that took me to that place....but soon morning arrives, no matter what part of the day...we look back and realize... Gloom, outstanding write... |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Sadelite, Usually I notice the birdsong, the flowers, the predawn colors of the sky, But today I just shrugged into my black leather, my black car And drove through the dimness on the black street Pleased you liked. Gloom |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, LeeJ I suppose the new day always brings new hope, At least to most, But there are times when it’s just another day. Glad you enjoyed the words Gloom |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Professor, Nothing stops a good write, enjoyed. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
must have been a lot warmer by you, last evening...still needed to be quilt covered here I wish for you some peaceful sleep~ M |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh, yes! I know what those nights can be like! ~ and I awake from them crowing like a raven instead of my usual chirping like a birdie! lol Seriously speaking, Dear Professor, you have a real talent for drawing your readers into your world ~ or the one around you! It ain't always pretty, but it sure is real!  Loves 'n hugs, EA |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I don't know why this write struck me of Vietnam, but it did. I have three uncles that served then, and all are thankfully old cantankerous men... Blessed. But it touched me that way. Sending you some Michigan air...fills the lungs, cools the sleep...lots of birds. Once in while the sun comes out...and when it does....It's Glorious Gloom! TD |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Time for a checkup old Gloomy guy! This has me concerned!  and Happy Easter! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you write some of my feelings well |
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