Open Poetry #31 |
wondering why the night closed in |
Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Wondering why the night closed in Wishing for moths to quiet the din Savoring times that flashed light within Traveling clouds to circle the spin Wishing for space to open the sigh Worrying words will never be nigh Feathery whispers softly sped by Wondering eyes closed tight as they cry Wouldn’t it seem that night won the fray Orators stood but had nothing to say Thoughts fought the feelings at bay Wouldn’t it seem the feel were of clay Didn’t I wonder just what would come out Sometimes I think it will all come about Frightening shadows have way too much clout Don’t you just wonder what this is all about? Drip drip drip go away I said Slip slip slip isn’t it time |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Great write Paul...some fantastic lines herein. Very much enjoyed the read. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ To have lived the dream of a love so true... |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Just great! |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
enjoyed |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Paul I can feel the load of heavy thoughts in this poem loud and clear. Well done! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I do believe you managed to convey exceptionally well, how the night felt as though it was closing in on you! Your poem reminded me of a few of my own! Well done, Paul! ~ May all your nights be restful and bring you peace. Linda |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
loved it |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Back up you go, Paul! Enjoyed! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
reminds me of my bathroom faucet driving me insane good piece! |
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