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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
”See a penny pick it up all the day you’ll have good luck” It shone in the half light Beneath the streetlight in the gutter by the drain, Midst the cast away, A newspaper of yesterday moistened by the rain, Twigs and a cola can Below where I stand leaning on my walking cane, Fallen from someone pocket Maybe seen and forgot it leaving it there to remain Till someone would bend So little effort to spend for a touch of luck to claim. But would no one bother The luck there to gather so I tossed another just the same. A pair of pennies to take If a little effort they’d make to gather from the drain. Gloom |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Professor An excellent write, with many directions. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write Gloom...great imagery. Very much enjoyed the read. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Before befriending butterflies |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
maybe no one believes in pennies anymore |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Seymour, Always value your responses Thank you, Enchantress Pleased you enjoyed Thank you, passing shadows I believe in them, I have many pounds of them stashed away Glad you liked this little ditty Gloom |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Grin... To know the worth of a penny is in itself the basis of all wealth. This was great! TD |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, ThisDiamond, Just like a single step is the beginning of a long journey A single penny can be the start of great wealth. You are kind in your response. Gloom |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Hmmm....a penny for your thoughts Gloom?  Enjoyed this. Chris Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Nightshade, My thoughts are not worth that much So I give them for free Glad you liked Gloom |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Professor, This sounds the reverse of something written in my father's genealogy. I've planned someday to write about it. To make a long story short, the family moved from the east coast to Pacific in a conestoga wagon. When they got there, they had one coin left. They threw it into the ocean to begin anew. (Amused by your title and poem.) Enjoyed. I, too, saw many directions this could take. Excellent writing. Sadelite [This message has been edited by Sadelite (04-07-2004 01:37 PM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Nodding. I used to pass the pennies by... I mean, it's just a penny, right? I still do sometimes, but not without thinking thoughts very much along the lines of these.  Thanks gloom, every now and then, I hit on a poem and find someone else thought the same thing I did and I feel a bit less lonely. Come to think of it? That happens alot with you. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah, Sir, I know this moment and bend to reach for all the luck I can copper in... |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Wow very .....gloomy Its was so cool though! Juju |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
These days, you'd better hang on to every penny you can get! lol...... enjoyed you poem, Gandolf! |
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