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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2004-04-06 05:28 PM

{From my Journals of Endless Winters}

~~

{Just before, the music is tender}

Now midnight-perhaps she sleeps with another
in greener fields and white orchids

I might say, there are no stars tonight
  instead I recall history
I walked by unrecognized, wondering
why am I alone

I found silence; a silence with the scent of oceans
a seething force of
nature changed or changing

but lifting the shades nothing had changed
even the panes revealed recent tears

darkness will settle

painting eyelids with velvet black
it all runs  together

If I ever pray again
it will be to the crimson moon -
I belonged there
one of those rare moments
of frozen space
&curved words

surviving the meeting of
worlds with false peace –

I have not yet released
   touching that which changes --
      lonely devotions
infected with such light
it echoes at daybreak
tracing  edges

I can not remember the
first time I noticed the walls
& it matched  my mood,
or even the smell of cigarettes

winter will leave with the taste of nothing
   {for years to come}

but

sad laughter gently inviting
the casual glance of

empty eyes

~~**~~
The sound of silence calls,
I hear your voice and suddenly
I'm falling, lost in a dream
The echo of our souls meet
~~**~~

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (04-07-2004 12:45 AM).]

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

1 posted 2004-04-06 06:03 PM

Another haunting, perfect write! hugs, Chris

Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale.
Hans Christian Anderson

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2004-04-06 06:04 PM

hauntingly beautiful,

expresses a serene sadness that I relate to all to well.

Beautiful writing Lauren.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

3 posted 2004-04-06 06:05 PM

smiling at the synchronicity of myself and ms. chrislane...

ladies!

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2004-04-06 06:15 PM

'Tis true..hauntingly beautiful..
I can find no other words at the moment.
Love ya pretty lady~

To have lived the dream of a love so true...
is to have seen a glimpse of heaven.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

5 posted 2004-04-06 07:15 PM

but lifting the shades nothing had changed
even the panes revealed recent tears

~~~

If I ever pray again
it will be to the crimson moon -
I belonged there
one of those rare moments
of frozen space
&curved words

surviving the meeting of
worlds with false peace –

I have not yet released
   touching that which changes --
      lonely devotions
infected with such light
it echoes at daybreak
tracing  edges

=====================================
"one of those rare moments
of frozen space
&curved words"

~~~

it echoes at daybreak
tracing  edges"

you will already just know...those lines went thru me...

yesssssss .... exactly ....

*sigh*

You haunt us all butterfly lovely me dear poetess L.

Home is a feeling I buried in you ...
I'm alright, I'm alright ... It only hurts when I breathe ...

M.E.

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

6 posted 2004-04-07 01:04 AM

"Now midnight-perhaps she sleeps with another
in greener fields and white orchids

I might say, there are no stars tonight
  instead I recall history
I walked by unrecognized, wondering
why am I alone"

Sometimes I read you and I just shake my head and wish I had the words.  Endless winters...yep.
Wonder would a new calender fix that??

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2004-04-07 02:37 AM

I'm with Duncan...sometimes I just read and shake my head, and never have the words

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

8 posted 2004-04-07 11:47 AM

I have to agree with the others..

Reading you is like sinking into a big, soft, comfortable couch and sighing..because its where I belong for that moment.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

9 posted 2004-04-07 12:37 PM

feeling this one L and yes it does leave one haunted ........

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

10 posted 2004-04-07 01:45 PM

Lauren

Your pen is so sensitive to the inner poet. This is so lovely.

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

11 posted 2004-04-07 09:45 PM

you have such a gentle approach, no matter what emotion you convey it always manages lull itself right deep inside the reader.

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