Open Poetry #31 |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Hang the trees with rain lament the sky shed afterbirth trails of blood drenched towers lay like doormats for holymen to roll down, bowling pin people scream with guernicca face prayers for salvation knock on eternal doors, rings on rings concentric circles bounce off padded walls above, ever ringing echoes taint white virgin clouds ring the world in rain, tears burst of twisted intestines broken hearted clouds hang the world in rain, tomorrow's karma swept up as it falls |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
"hang the world in rain" WOW, this was a very powerful write. You should be very happy with this piece its my most favourite of yours and its headed straight for my library!! ^*-Kimberley-*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
This write brought to mind the larger state of the world for some reason... A personal touch upon the anguish and restlessness of gray skies. You convey emotions so well Inked One. Hugs, TD |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Reality is harsh, and your poem conveys that so well, oh inkedgoddess one! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write Michele... So true..so true. Hugs~ ~Before befriending butterflies |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh ouch |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
InkyOne~ Sifting through the layers ... I found soft beauty in this - 'rings on rings concentric circles bounce off padded walls above, ever ringing echoes taint white virgin clouds' *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
interesting.....very interesting |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
You have penned strong images here, dear Michelle. Apocalyptical rain. Excellent write. Love, Margherita |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks for hearing me rant |
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