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If it weren't for the coldness..
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If it weren't for the coldness.. |
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zenny Member
since 2002-11-24
Posts 371Belgium 
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A sunny day it was to me expectations high I stretched far out and yes, did see a train bringing me...my guy Then there you stood, i just adored the sight of you so close But, one look: no bags, no clothes no intentions, nothing good You looked into my eyes, me longing for a hug if it weren't for the coldness, guarding your eyes, saying NO, I might have tried... Then there we were, you talking your talk, I crying my tears Now, still: I cry, I talk But you... want silence |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
You looked into my eyes, me longing for a hug if it weren't for the coldness, guarding your eyes, saying NO, I might have tried... I feel the longing in your words. Well done. Chris |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is terribly melancholic. Great write. Hope this isn't about your situation ... too sad! Love, Margherita |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
A very good poem. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
good to read you again, zenny!  but sorry that you're feeling left out in the cold |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Good to hear from the other side Makes you think Dave |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 very touching write |
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