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An observation.... |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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The look of you could part my sentences bound in marriage to tripping blasts of caught breath you say no one has studied your face like I. But how could I avert eyes to lesser things when I know the grasp of thick lash to blue vein map of eyelid the sweeping stare like a rush of multiple bodies to mine. The look of you with colours like these that scar deeper than your white and my black is a nervous shiver of skin I am magnetic to your blue a fever of iris. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
One word and I can't find it. Excellent doesn't do this justice. I'm going to rummage. I WILL be back! |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
im in the same position as sunshine...cant come up with a word to reflect how incredible this poem is.... awe inspiring  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The look of you could part my sentences -------------------------------- The look of you with colours like these that scar deeper than your white and my black is a nervous shiver of skin I am magnetic to your blue a fever of iris. =============================== well I know what to say..... OH MAN!!!!!! I WISH I HAD WROTE THIS!!!! The look of you could part my sentences gem-girlie.. ya had me from your opening line....and OH WHAT A LINE it is!!  Home is a feeling I buried in you ... I'm alright, I'm alright ... It only hurts when I breathe ... M.E. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Always amazed at how the same girl who can write so gracefully, can call me the things you've called me..i bring out the bst in people i guess lol |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
The look of you could part my sentences YUP... ANOTHER WWWOWWW KEEP EM COMING GEM another keeper. Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
there you go again, being magnetic gemma, you really do create totally unique, new shards of brilliant light |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Fabulous! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I know what you mean |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
^*-*^*-*^*-*^*-*^ You write about such wondrous things. This is a beautiful poem, very deep and meaningful. You obviously love this person so much. We've all been there where you can't get enough of someone!! ^*Wonderful write*^  ^*-Kimberley-*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I agree, this is exceptional....... I think these lines are just too cool! "the sweeping stare like a rush of multiple bodies to mine" Blue on blue lace on satin......There I go....Mind wandering....Good writing! Eric Ain't doin nothin at all |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
A keen observation for sure. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wow. this one made me holler the dreaded "f" word. PUBLISH. *shaking my head* I wanna write like this |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"The look of you with colours like these that scar deeper than your white and my black is a nervous shiver of skin I am magnetic to your blue" Have I mentioned that it's real good to read ya again Gem?? |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
such style little gem ... ....... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"But how could I avert eyes to lesser things when I know the grasp of thick lash to blue vein map of eyelid the sweeping stare like a rush of multiple bodies to mine" Wow! That is breath taking... "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
bravo dear lady... bravo.. very nice to read you again... and I see you have lost nothing in your time away..you still compose words as I would like to.. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
WOW. what do I say to all these beautiful things you've said? I'm so grateful for them, and totally shocked. I'm in awe of you all as writers, so I can't see how mine deserves such praise. But, Thankyou so much. Love n hugs to you all. xxx |
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