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Another day in paradise
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Another day in paradise |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Writing on the wall, my own... what’s to do but cross my arms and shrug in disregard of your appraisal. I never asked to be loved. I only needed enough to take the edge off being alone. Another day in paradise hangs before me an elusive noose. I remember thinking it would be a day or two that I’d amuse, but here I nod at the recognition of my expire, however imperceptible small murders among the likes of me may be. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
That's a slap upside the head... your muse did you proud... ask her to stay so you can do it again! |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Good! |
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zippi Member
since 2004-03-31
Posts 56California |
Exciting poetry, I liked it bunches. Rene` |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Maybe... Nice write m'friend! |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Dunc, good to read you! People dismiss others in many different situations in inhuman and unforgivable ways. keeping this...love how it ends. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
quote:if i don't have time to come back and do justice...this is way coolish. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent Dunc! May we see more please? Hugs~ ~Before befriending butterflies |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Duncan Symbols rub ignition lights and shadows fall within the night, enjoyed. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I never asked to be loved. I only needed enough to take the edge off being alone. What a fantastic verse Duncan~ Even if it is "in my face" I liked this too... Another day in paradise hangs before me an elusive noose. *choke* Heck, the entire poem was right on the mark! No doubt, paradise is a nice place to visit, but it seems as soon as we get there, it's time to come home. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I never asked to be loved. I only needed enough to take the edge off being alone. ---------------------------------- I nod at the recognition of my expire, however imperceptible small murders among the likes of me may be. =============================== whoa ... this is like having a piano dropped on you... although in the mood youre in..me thinks me better not give you any ideas.   "Lil diddy bout Jack and Diane.... oh yeah life goes on ... long after the thrill of living is gone...." (YKIKYK)(yep, its another weekend) yayaya Home is a feeling I buried in you ... |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Another day in paradise hangs before me an elusive noose. Awesome write! Enjoyed. Chris Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Duncan I liked the honesty of feeling in this...lots!  |
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ChemicalRepose Member
since 2004-03-28
Posts 102 |
This made me feel like I was lying in fetal position slowly moving back and forth, after having my heart stripped of it's vitality. And yet I enjoyed it, thanks. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
It's midnight..so I thought I would pop this to the top of daily topics... just because it's that good.. made me smile with it's simplistic truth. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
So, what do Phil Collins and John (Cougar) Mellencamp have in common with this poem? Duncan! I really liked this one D - it's harsh, hard, to-the-point and could have come only from your pen. That's one of the things about you that catches me the most; a distinctive style that aligns quite nicely with my warped view of the world. Tres cool, kudos and the like - I've never had an admixture of two songs stuck in my head at one time... quote: quote: |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Thanks ya'll and thanks Bluesy for the unintentional title...  C...Funny thing is, I really thought this one sucked. Go figure... |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I never asked to be loved. I only needed enough to take the edge off being alone''' ~~ gads you blew me away with this-such a emotion I hate touching sometimes...always knowing its there -- ~~**~~ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
quote: excuses, excuses, excuses and of course, jiminy asks "so what?" yadda yadda |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla |
has a dark feel to it I like it |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I like it! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I like this "I nod at the recognition of my expire, however imperceptible small murders among the likes of me may be." Good work Regards Eric Ain't doin nothin at all |
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