Open Poetry #31 |
Let the Rain be my Tears |
Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Eyes too dry to cry Walk a rainy morn alone Drenching red filled eyes And chilling this bags of bones That wanders away from home. Gloom |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
So incredibly sad and lonely. If this in fact is you in this poem, I think you need a nice hot cup of cocoa and a friendly shoulder to cry on! This really packed a punch in my solar plexus! You certainly have a way of creating an atmosphere with only a few words, Dear Poet! Warm hugs & a big mug of cocoa, EA |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Come back...tea is on. And I have a remedy for the red eyes... |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Earth Angel, For taking the time to read and respond, I’m not much of a cocoa fan, I tend toward the teas and wines, But I appreciate the sentiment. As for the other, Well, the loneliness long ago stopped bothering me and the Sadness is just part of my soul. And mostly, I am a quiet person of few words. Thank you, Sunshine, I’ll take my tea with double sugar, since I need extra sweetening. The eyes are because of a medical condition, more than mood But it does lend itself to the mood of the poem. Gloom |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
a little awkward when read out loud but the scheme is nice. -majnu |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
It is pure art to convey the emotions through written word. You do know of course, that you do this consistently well. As for the sentiment...I can only say, there is this reality...and there is also the sunshine of a new morn. Collective shoulder, hugs, prayers...tea...sunshine. TD |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I'm with TD on this one. Cheer up Gandolf! You have the magic to do it! |
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