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A Desk-mess Hidden Senyru
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A Desk-mess Hidden Senyru |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
I came with nothing yet enough for your taking; now i leave you fool. *I found this when cleaning off my long past due desk-mess. It was written in my writing on the back of an old envelope. It is an old piece apparently and of little relevance to me today. I don't remember even writing it or to what it was reference. Anyway, I thought I'd post this and throw the envelope in the trash. I wonder how many more poems will become undercovered in the clean-up! |
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bslicker 
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
Sounds pretty staight forward to me..... bernie  A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Perhaps that was after one of our conversations wherein I said: We come into this world alone and we leave alone. Sorry, if that had a sad effect on you. It wasn't meant to -- only that we have to learn to live with selfness and at the same time, selflessness, if that makes any sense. To me, it's kind of a comforting thought sometimes to know that living as a human is the hard part, this existence, the taffy pull (if you know what I mean -- from the poem "love stretches us.") Well, forgive the long response, but I just thought maybe this is where it came from with your added response to the thought, expressed. But on second read, maybe it's a statement about not having expectations, being taken advantage of, then breaking it off -- and that could be interpreted against just about anything....work, love, people you deal with socially, etc., etc... lots of love...........jo |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now you're going to make me clean my desk? I can see parts of it...and I haven't lost my snack yet. If your love life were on the rocks, it would make sense. If you were answering Iliana...that makes sense, too. What do you think you meant?  |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
darn sunshine, are you eating my snack,,, i thought i left that on my desk.... opps came home a client's and found my whole desk clean,, now i don't know where anything is. oh yea my orig. reply was on a love life... bernie A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
I have no idea... I think it may have been related to employment. I'm a very capable person but I feel political complications have stripped me to nothing at times; sometimes a little frustrated... I do see where I played on the word full/fool. This has me baffled. Jo, did you read the one about What Happened to Outstanding? I don't think you have. I think it may relate to that. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sadie, I feel like we're playing "Clue". Now I'll be awake all night, trying to figure it out. |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Sunshine, Yes, I had crackers on my desk. But they were a little, um, old... Of the two, the poem grew better with age. Bernie, Love life? Don't think so! Maybe written of a dream? (I sometimes wake in the middle of the morning and write after a dream.) Who knows? Gee, can you get those guys to clean MY desk? I'[m willing to take the risk of them misplacing the misplaced. [This message has been edited by Sadelite (03-30-2004 10:28 PM).] |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Sunshine, No, no no. You get your sleep, Young Lady, so that you can be bright eyed and bushy tailed for tomorrow! Sadie [This message has been edited by Sadelite (03-30-2004 10:30 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this sounds a little like me |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
With all these interpretations, I too feel I have to KNOW what this is about! You thought you had nothing to offer, but there was so much, that those who received the gift, now can’t do without. Challenging poem, dear Sadie! Love and hugs. Margherita  |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
passing shadows, hmmmm. "it sounds a little like me..." not a good thing! I wish you better luck next poem... Chuckle. Have a good day. Margherita, You make a person feel soooo good about their work, even a desk-mess-mixed-up-message of senryu. Thank you for your positive comments. Sadie |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
excellent slap! Well written. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Good cut to the bone..aren't you glad you didn't mail that to an old friend? |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Regardless of where it came from or to whom it was directed, you have written a very profound verse... I really enjoyed it. You tell it like it is! |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I write my best that way find it later. Juju |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Definitely Senryu in every sense of the word ~P |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Now you'll have everyone here at Pips cleaning their desk-messes. LOL, wonder if my old envelopes might hold such a treasure.  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
darn, you've made me think about dusting and washing up my floors...yup yup yup, its time for spring cleaning, curtains, windows and all...you nasty boy! I was so trying to forget that chore! Good one! smile and hugs |
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