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0 posted 2004-03-28 01:20 PM



Open to Interpretation
(a Rondelet)

In scene askew
as laughter wanes to gentle sigh,
in scene askew
a thousand thoughts to misconstrue
of who I've been, of how, of why
and where the truth disguised the lie
in scene askew.

© Copyright 2004 Dawn van Krieken-Smith - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-03-28 01:23 PM


Excellent... enjoyed!
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2 posted 2004-03-28 01:24 PM



Bernie

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

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3 posted 2004-03-28 01:35 PM


Dawn, I can relate to this but don't know the words for a good reply
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4 posted 2004-03-28 02:07 PM


Excellent form Dawn.
You have mastered it well.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
   Has held me in the same embrace ~

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5 posted 2004-03-28 02:45 PM


enjoyed


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6 posted 2004-03-28 03:44 PM


VERY NICE!
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7 posted 2004-03-28 03:53 PM


Very Good

Enjoyed.

Maree

Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

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8 posted 2004-03-28 03:55 PM


You're such a clever writer, muted.  I really enjoyed this one.  
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9 posted 2004-03-28 06:50 PM


Dawn~
Your versatility is astounding~

THIS IS MARVELOUS~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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10 posted 2004-03-29 01:48 AM


you are all a bunch of sweeties thank you for the lovely responses
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11 posted 2004-03-29 04:36 PM


Perfect!
TD

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12 posted 2004-03-29 04:38 PM


i like this.

now, i am unfamiliar with traditional poetry schemes.. what exactly makes a rhodelet? im just curious

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13 posted 2004-03-29 04:59 PM


I have never been good at these things--your skill show here, m'friend--not a bit contrived and the meanings layer as the words form naturally.

Much enjoyed, dawn.

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14 posted 2004-03-29 05:02 PM



An excellent rendering, Dawn.  Thank you.

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15 posted 2004-03-29 08:19 PM


Thank you guys for making me smile, you are more than appreciated

and EagleScorpion I have sent you an email to answer your question

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16 posted 2004-03-29 10:23 PM


A difficult form that you have handled very well. I'm impressed
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17 posted 2004-03-29 11:31 PM


Excellent Dawn !!!... I have never been brave enough to venture into any other form other than rhyme
Hope

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18 posted 2004-03-31 09:45 AM


What a treat!  You are just so much in the flow of your Muse....~P
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19 posted 2004-04-04 09:44 PM


Muchly Enjoyed the read

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