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Bonnie j
Senior Member

since 2003-06-27

Posts 1588
Ohio

0 posted 2004-04-02 06:10 AM

Abandoned Cottage

The rays of the sun whispering through the pines and evergreen.
The chorus of exotic birds is the only sound you hear.
Hidden within the forest is an abandoned cottage.
The windows broken, the steps rotted with time.
Inside, the spiders weave their lace.
The dust dancing, resembling sheer particles of stardust.
The fireplace, no longer a place of warmth,
is cold and damp.
This little cottage was once filled with love, laughter and a child to be born.
Once a lifetime ago-
This cottage had a garden
filled with blazing colors.
Colors of deep fiery red, butterscotch yellows, snowy whites,
silky caches of lavender and filled with every shade of green.
The fragrances of honeysuckle, rose, gardenia
and the smell of fresh baked bread with rosemary and thyme.
The cottage white with lavender shutters,
the steps painted with floral bouquets.
Inside a man and a woman deeply in love.
One day sickness came, death took the woman
and the unborn child away.
Each day the man would die inside and pray to be released.
On a day warm with a gentle breeze.
This lonely man walked silently
into the quiet forest.
Never would he return to this cottage
of shattered dreams.
Now only the spider and the dust dance
within these cottage walls.
The only fragrance in the air is the honeysuckle and the
wild lavender rose.

Love Bon-Bon

Kicking Kim
Member

since 2001-04-16

Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!

1 posted 2004-04-02 06:20 AM

WOW

I wasn't expecting the final part of
the poem at all.
The huge contrast between the
beginning and end was astounding.

You write so beautifully and are able
to take the reader exactly where you want.
This poem was filled with love
however you still depicted the sadness.
This was excellent!!

^*-Kimberley-*^

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

2 posted 2004-04-02 06:27 AM

amazingingly beautiful, yet so bittersweet
you've painted an entire lifetime here...
and while reading I couldn't help but think, lets purchase this cottage and fix it up again, filling it with color...love...bright happiness shining from within while the warm fire dances inside...after we're done, it'll jump right out at everyone who passes, like a Kincade painting. Thank you dear heart, for writing and sharing...Happy Friday! love ya sis, me

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2004-04-02 08:42 AM

wow, wasn't expecting that ending...very sad write

zippi
Member

since 2004-03-31

Posts 56
California

4 posted 2004-04-02 09:02 AM

Beautiful love story, your imagery is fantastic, I was there! So sad he ending, broke my heart.
Rene`

Toerag
Member Ascendant

since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

5 posted 2004-04-02 09:31 AM

I can smell it from here....

The Lonely Stranger
Member

since 1999-06-18

Posts 361
Upstate, NY, USA

6 posted 2004-04-02 10:45 AM

Isn't it strange how something as inanimate as a cabin can just look like a dead structure to two eyes can be a picture of three lifetimes to another pair of eyes. Incredible write.

... There is no normal life Wyatt, just life ... so live!

Grover
Senior Member

since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

7 posted 2004-04-02 03:00 PM

As perfect as a flower!

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

8 posted 2004-04-02 04:18 PM

I just love to read your stories; just wish they were longer!
JL

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