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sunshinemc Junior Member
since 2003-09-20
Posts 27 |
Ive reached a low so low I look up and see endless black so low that I cant turn back. My dreams are haunted and my thoughts invaded My look on life has recently been jaded The fire was put out and stepped on never to be lit again My mind races.. Wondering where to begin. Its to hard on my own Where do i go The certainty in my voice is only a show Someone help, because I dont know. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
poignant write well, I guess the only direction is up after you've reached the bottom |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
There's lots of help right here in the blue pages. Thanks for sharing; good write. Sounds like you could use one of these:  |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
luv it , crys for help , passion all around this poem ...and let me say something , it may seem like your fire might be out for good , but just wait , you never know what kind of spark might fly by in the wind , to catch your bonfire ablaze ... -the wolfyman |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
if I understand You have talent and that will not leave you Write as you can and know you have quality dave |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
My dreams are haunted and my thoughts invaded ~*~ I think all good writers have these same thoughts... so it's not cliche, it's reality you're speaking... keep it up, little sunshine... when you reach the top of the mountain, I shall show you the edelweis...  |
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EternitysHorizon Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 145Twilight's Orchestra |
life balance often unwanted valleys to mountains starlight blackest sight one fumbles ever reaching calling for the light "High on the Mountain, where the Sun stil Shines, and the water runs a little lazy." |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
well done, expressed nicely |
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