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Of Crow And Mourning Dove
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Of Crow And Mourning Dove |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Of Crow And Mourning Dove A bolus of cold leaves clogs the gutter. One crow rummages something hapless out of the pile, flies a step to eat. Its call echoes stark as concrete through the auburn light. Dove is close now, still searching, Her voice near yet far, a shadowy crochet of sadness along the edge of hearing as she moves, a hesitating pastel spirit along the flowered hedge. She seems to live in mourning, and today the crow knows why. So does she; the shattered nest remains, a spall of tiny feathers still dusting the twilit grass. She calls again in tones as smooth as dusk, but there comes no answer. Tomorrow will bring forgetting, but today she searches endlessly, while the crow eats. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed It is the way of things, I know....but I can't help but relate this to myself and feel the loss. The mourning dove may forget, I search still! The imagery in this is superb...and I had to look up a certain word, bolus. You are a gifted poet and I'm so glad to see you posting!  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ratleader Good symbols, good metaphors, good read. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
May I just join the circle, and thank you once again, for your excellent insight, as the world speeds on? You seem able to slow it down for a moment, a gift, indeed, and allow us a brief respite, to feel, with soul. Thank God for you. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
May I just echo what Karilea said..? I enjoyed this ever so much! Hugs~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Ratleader, I'm glad I, too, stopped to read this. Your imagery is tremendous. Yes, time did slow as I sadly sank into this. You are so gifted in observation and planting its seeds. Take care(I agree with Sunshine-I thank God for you.) Sadie |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
if it wouldn't be too selfish, I could relate this to myself too excellent work! I'm so glad you didn't stay gone, Ed. I would have missed you dearly. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"your excellent insight, as the world speeds on? You seem able to slow it down for a moment, a gift, indeed, and allow us a brief respite, to feel, with soul." ~ Sunshine's reply perfectly reflects my own thoughts on your poetry, Dear Poet! ~ and it beared repeating!  EA |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
glad to see you back missed your writings enjoyed this one!  |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
What a truly great read! Eric |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhEdRatledge~ I'm going to say that this is your FINEST writing~ Hands down ... that's it !! And ... now sending to a dear one who needs to read it~  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Dove is close now, still searching, Her voice near yet far, a shadowy crochet of sadness along the edge of hearing as she moves, a hesitating pastel spirit along the flowered hedge. This is one of your best, my friend... The imagery is beyond beautiful... I don't just see... I hear. *S* Tomorrow will bring forgetting, but today she searches endlessly, while the crow eats. I didn't want it to end... but what an incredible ending!!! This is poetry at its best!!! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
sad, Ed last year I came out of a store and on the walk was a dove... standing around a small, what looked like pile. It was her baby that either fell out of the nest in the eaves or was pushed out...and people could walk right up to the area and she wouldn't move...keeping watch. good write M |
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dingusjr Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 415Missouri |
Gees, Ed! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I know a crow and I know a dove. And, it is uncanny how you have captured both! |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
this is fantastic |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Ahhh Mr rat...may I call you that? heh I'm feeling kinda cheeky tonight  The imagery in this is.. superb m'friend..definitely one of your best. I'm keeping it Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
last years nests that cling to the branches the bird returns does she remember? |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
perhaps one day, the crow and dove will join together at a table of unfathomable wealth...peace, joy, music... Your words are accepting yet, understanding the way of things...very much enjoyed this read. |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Excellent write. Enjoyed it. alan |
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