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Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

0 posted 2004-03-23 10:46 PM

I am sick
twisted out of my scull
I dream visons perverse
mother's hands
hide child's mind
from my words
as they seap into mind
burning
impression infinate
like first playboy I read
at twelve
miss january
never to forget

I want your mind
I want to peel off your skin
to see if you really have a heart
underneath the pretense
I want my words to ring
painful orgasmic
at each newscast
pta meeting

I want your innoscent
not yet spoiled
virgin pink brains
still open to thoughts
seducing little minds through poetry
filling the with cummings
Keats and Elliot
til they scream in orgasmic delight
I am sure they will find
me
lock me up
for poetic indecency
teaching of a minor

I want you young and pink
I want you old decreped
I want your mind empty hollow
open your mind just a peak
and maybee one day you will
find me
and have two
or maybee one

original

thought.

bbent
Senior Member

since 2001-01-07

Posts 521
Alaska

1 posted 2004-03-24 02:12 AM

I enjoyed...was like a Vincent Price,Frank Zappa mind meld.Would make a great movie.Very original presentation.

Live like it's your last day...
Dance like nobody's watching...
Love like you've never been hurt...

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

2 posted 2004-03-24 02:16 AM

If there are poetry police, they will be after you for sure! This was really a brilliant, original poem.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2004-03-24 12:52 PM

"I want your mind
I want to peel off your skin"

OUCH! sorry Brad, it's mine and I'm keepin it, it's served me well so far.
But this write reminded me of an incident in college. I had a 'close-minded professor' who suggested I was 'too open-minded' (ie liberal politically) for my own good.

I'll quote him:
'Don't be so open-minded that your brains fall out.' I laughed then, and am still laughing at that imagery. So far, all my scans show this brain is doing A-OK.

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

4 posted 2004-03-24 01:07 PM

thank you

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

5 posted 2004-03-24 03:56 PM

"I want your innoscent
not yet spoiled
virgin pink brains
still open to thoughts
seducing little minds through poetry
filling the with cummings
Keats and Elliot
til they scream in orgasmic delight
I am sure they will find
me
lock me up
for poetic indecency
teaching of a minor"

Hi Dan!!!

The lines above, although, very raw, I loved the thinking behind them...

Give me someone who hasn't had their thoughts molded by society or environment...let them read the old favorites...ahhh yes! Great job!

"toss me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

6 posted 2004-03-24 05:49 PM

I read this three times and all I can say is that it's very original and the rise and fall through harsh creativity is excellent!

Eric

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

7 posted 2004-03-24 08:27 PM

very unusual perspective, but thats what lends to it being so enjoyable to read...liked this

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

8 posted 2004-03-25 08:48 AM

thank you

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