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EternitysHorizon Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 145Twilight's Orchestra |
Watching near silence words explore Life to Living Waiting Patient touch Gardeners knowing Speak to Seeking Silent Words Aligned Blooms Thistles Grown to Being Deeper TouchHopeRevealing Give unto Leading Gift to Giving Meaning Offering SelfInsight beyond "lovely,great" Received to Knowing Words Spark heartstrings speak AllThings Redeemed to Beginning "High on the Mountain, where the Sun stil Shines, and the water runs a little lazy." |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
love the progression here |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Even thistles carry pollen, welcoming bees and butterflies...  Even thistles. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
EternitysHorizon Enjoyed the read. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
nice  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very very well penned indeed. Hugs~ Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
This was a fun one to play with. I took a specific line number from each verse and paralleled it with the following verses of that line number. I did this with each line. Interesting reading. I liked it that way as well as the orginal. Overall great piece any way I looked at it. You're so creative! Sadie |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
You struck a chord... Balanced...progressive... communication in all its forms... Sometimes silences speak volumes, and like the gardener...patience is the key to new beginnings. Really appreciated your thoughtful write. TD |
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EternitysHorizon Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 145Twilight's Orchestra |
Thanks to ALL Sadelite I think you have found a key. As there are actually Four obvious poems here, and let us say more balanced within. I like to say as much in few words and most importantly, interweave, entwine all. I hate wasted words. very glad you experimented with this if you try some more, you will find more just the way I write Thanks again "High on the Mountain, where the Sun stil Shines, and the water runs a little lazy." |
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EternitysHorizon Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 145Twilight's Orchestra |
For Sunshine Thistles armor radiance garden kneel down armored friends landing place to seek the seed which one attends all possibilities Birds Brazilian, Greenlanders, IceTropics abound no prejudice yet thanking gift for gift, rain snow spread seed garden grows gardens are forever sometimes move for room Surrounded by the warrior thistles Freedom lifts petals SunWise and no mere man's hand could suffice desparing infinite gardens hues "High on the Mountain, where the Sun stil Shines, and the water runs a little lazy." |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Oh, YES! I saw at least two more plays. Incredible form! I am envious of all the talent here! Thanks for spurring me on to check out further interps. I just read your response to Sunshine above. Nice one! Your talent overwhelms me. ~Sadie~ |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I loved this puzzle. I've read it about four times (maybe I should say, examined it) -- still seeing more. Library for further study.  |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you...this then...in return... ~*~ Here, among the flowers growing Lay petals blown by wind, A slight ravage of nature’s breath But nay, no evil thoughts within ~ For petals are but lonely veils A color of bright in spot. Truth, reality will all unfold When seeds replant the pot. Some look for only colored veils And see not the hidden source… Like the dust that flies behind the tale Of the traveler, and his horse |
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EternitysHorizon Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 145Twilight's Orchestra |
nice reply Sunshine, hence While petals fall aground blooming time their pageant song tis widening eye posessed gift they that slowly ripening seeds may adrift one day you speak symponies nature lies true in melodies sweeping past tense yet were the moment vibrant actualized as vibrant petals lonely as they fall would we have attended the concert hall at all call thee then colors for bees adoration gather buzzing whispers argue over glorious revenue betting boldest crimson lure swarms as mankind droves for passing beauty true not always purest fruit man as nature is as calling brings and we but blindly choose glowing petals hoping renowned seed reward see to seen "High on the Mountain, where the Sun stil Shines, and the water runs a little lazy." |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah...well done, Sir. ~*~ But, crack'd the seed for oils within and rub the rock for dust of red then dip the quill within the womb and write me what'd be said that leaves on leaves the toil of soul those words that trip a tongue's delight that, savored, last, into the night that, once held, is captured, in one's sight and in the light thus captured within it's gleam is once again gone, as dust, so let me seed yet one more dream... ~*~ irk. I may have to borrow me back again. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
This wonderful post just keeps on giving and giving! The replies from both you and your readers add cream to this morning's coffee read!  Love & Light, EA |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Hey you two. I love your replies! I don't mean to be the eavesdropping neighbor, but they are too good to miss! Poetry just flows from you both. Perhaps these should be put by the scrolling bar sometime. Sadie |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ladies, ladies...feel free to add your own? Think of it as an evolving choka...extended. |
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